The graph shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.
The line graph illustrates the information about the percentage of the people aged 65 and above, over a hundred year period from 1940 to 2040 in different nations.
Overall, it can be seen that the proportion of the population of the given age in all three countries are set to rise significantly.
Looking at the details, the USA stood at around 9.5% in 1940, which was nearly two times higher than the Japan, at 5%. On the other hand, Sweden began at approximately 8%, a bit lower than the USA. While the USA and Sweden experienced upward trends from 1940 to 1980, Japan entirely witnessed an opposite direction from 1940 to 1960. However, roughly around 1999, Sweden overcame the USA, whereas Japan remained stable at 3% for about two decades (1960-1985). Subsequently, after 2000, in Sweden and Japan, there was a considerable growth in the figure, compared to the USA, where the percentage levelled off at just under 15% until 2020.
As regards the prediction, in the USA, the net percent of the aged people is likely to reach 25% in 2040, as opposed to Sweden to around 23% that will put Sweden in the last rank. In contrast, by the end of the period (2040) in Japan, the rate will have grown sharply to 27%, which means that the nation is predicted to top the list.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
1. 'Japan' is not developed well, for example, the important year in 2030
2. USA and Sweden has a similar pattern, but it can't figure out from the content.
see a sample:
https://www.testbig.com/ielts-writing-task-i-essays/graph-below-shows-p…
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 9 10
No. of Words: 227 200
No. of Characters: 1000 1000
No. of Different Words: 136 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.882 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.405 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.448 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 60 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 38 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 25 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 18 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.222 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.051 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.556 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.423 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.691 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.103 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4
Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, whereas, while, as regards, in contrast, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 1.00243902439 299% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 33.7804878049 142% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1051.0 965.302439024 109% => OK
No of words: 227.0 196.424390244 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62995594714 4.92477711251 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.88156143495 3.73543355544 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48998069898 2.65546596893 94% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 106.607317073 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.607929515419 0.547539520022 111% => OK
syllable_count: 307.8 283.868780488 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.07073170732 374% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 3.36585365854 238% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.4046780026 43.030603864 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.777777778 112.824112599 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2222222222 22.9334400587 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.55555555556 5.23603664747 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175061885013 0.215688989381 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0733265613573 0.103423049105 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0927953804627 0.0843802449381 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142109501531 0.15604864568 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100766049548 0.0819641961636 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.2329268293 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 61.2550243902 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.3012195122 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.87 11.4140731707 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.06136585366 101% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 40.7170731707 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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