The map below is of the town of Garlsdon and shows two possible sites for a new supermarket.

Essay topics:

The map below is of the town of Garlsdon and shows two possible sites for a new supermarket.

The map illustrates two probable placements of a new superstore in a town designated as Garlsdon with the population of 65,000.

Overall, neither site is appropriate for all the towns, however, for customers from Cransdon, Hindon and Garlsdon, the site in the suburb (s1) would presumably propose more benefits.

The initial location (s1) is feasible as it will be situated out of town which is just off the main road to the town of Hindon, about 12 Kilometers to the north-west. Being out of the city it would be able to facilitate more car parking along with providing access to the high number of shoppers travelling via car from both Hindon and Garlsdon. Similarly, it is also located close to the railway line connecting two towns to Cransdon with the only distance of 25 Km to the south-east, this ensures numerous customers would also be able to approach the supermarket via train.

On the contrary, the second probable site, s2 is right in the town centre, which will facilitate only the local inhabitants. Location wise, the superstore could be accessed via road or rail nearby yet the site possesses the threat of traffic congestion.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s Garlsdon with the population of 65,000 Overall, neither site is appropriate for...
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Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...f 25 Km to the south-east, this ensures a large number of customers would also be able to approac...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, second, similarly, so, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 1.00243902439 599% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 33.7804878049 83% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 962.0 965.302439024 100% => OK
No of words: 197.0 196.424390244 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88324873096 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.74642080493 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75759289706 2.65546596893 104% => OK
Unique words: 115.0 106.607317073 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.583756345178 0.547539520022 107% => OK
syllable_count: 289.8 283.868780488 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 22.4926829268 142% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.7818363988 43.030603864 153% => OK
Chars per sentence: 160.333333333 112.824112599 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.8333333333 22.9334400587 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.83333333333 5.23603664747 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234384935198 0.215688989381 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105169114662 0.103423049105 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0967589670447 0.0843802449381 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154486001848 0.15604864568 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0675256341583 0.0819641961636 82% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.0 13.2329268293 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.46 61.2550243902 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.3012195122 142% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.62 11.4140731707 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.15 8.06136585366 114% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 40.7170731707 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.4329268293 166% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.9970731707 135% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.0658536585 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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