The pie charts show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.

Essay topics:

The pie charts show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.

The pie charts compare the proportion of retail sectors consummed on online in New Zealand in 10 years between 2003 and 2013.

It is clearly shown that New Zealand people spend money more on film and music, and also books in 2013 than a decade ago, while they consumed less to travel and clothes in 2013 that 2003 on online shops.

In the detail, travel was the best selling item in 2003 accounting for 36% of online sales but its ratio decreased at 29% after 10years and became the second best seller. On the other hand, film and music made up the biggest part of online sales since it increased from 21% in 2003 to 33% in 2013.

Other remained areas also changed. The proportion of people buying books rised slightly from 19% to 22% during at the same time. Conversely, the similar portion dropped in the percentage of clothes from 24% to 16% at that period.

Overall, we can see that New Zealand people's consuming pattern moved from travel to film and music greatly.

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Average: 4.9 (2 votes)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, second, so, while, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.0 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 9.0 5.60731707317 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 33.7804878049 104% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 807.0 965.302439024 84% => OK
No of words: 175.0 196.424390244 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.61142857143 4.92477711251 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.63713576256 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.12425449108 2.65546596893 80% => OK
Unique words: 106.0 106.607317073 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.605714285714 0.547539520022 111% => OK
syllable_count: 225.9 283.868780488 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.6228674063 43.030603864 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.875 112.824112599 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.875 22.9334400587 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.375 5.23603664747 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.326957926382 0.215688989381 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.129092673675 0.103423049105 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.149975458435 0.0843802449381 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188601307754 0.15604864568 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.162731085379 0.0819641961636 199% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.2329268293 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.54 61.2550243902 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.3012195122 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.46 11.4140731707 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.06136585366 103% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 40.7170731707 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.4329268293 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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