The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

Essay topics:

The plans below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

The plans below describes a university ‘s sport centre now and how it become after rebuild. it can be clearly seen from the plans that many facilities will be set up in the future.

According to the plans, at the moment , there is a 25 metres swimming pool between two outdoor courts while the gym at the behind of the pool. In addition, the seating located on the right of the pool and is opposite of the changing room whereas the reception near the entrance.

By contrast, in the future, the left outdoor courts will be replace by a huge leisure pool and there will be another changing room in front of it. Furthermore, the others outdoor courts will become the sports hall and two dance studio will establish next to it, meanwhile the gym will be expand. Moreover, a café lounge and a changing room will be open at the right corner of the centre whilst a sports shop will appear on the other side.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 76, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'becomes'?
Suggestion: becomes
...ity 's sport centre now and how it become after rebuild. it can be clearly seen f...
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Line 1, column 98, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...re now and how it become after rebuild. it can be clearly seen from the plans that...
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Line 3, column 38, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... According to the plans, at the moment , there is a 25 metres swimming pool betw...
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Line 5, column 203, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...e others outdoor courts will become the sports hall and two dance studio will establis...
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Line 5, column 229, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'studio' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'studios'.
Suggestion: studios
...ll become the sports hall and two dance studio will establish next to it, meanwhile th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, moreover, whereas, while, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 1.00243902439 898% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 33.7804878049 74% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 746.0 965.302439024 77% => OK
No of words: 166.0 196.424390244 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.49397590361 4.92477711251 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.58944267634 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.28855350419 2.65546596893 86% => OK
Unique words: 93.0 106.607317073 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.560240963855 0.547539520022 102% => OK
syllable_count: 220.5 283.868780488 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 23.3526644899 43.030603864 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 106.571428571 112.824112599 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7142857143 22.9334400587 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.14285714286 5.23603664747 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238068859824 0.215688989381 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132828198812 0.103423049105 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.17176224292 0.0843802449381 204% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177853364356 0.15604864568 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.160683808626 0.0819641961636 196% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.2329268293 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.51 61.2550243902 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.3012195122 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.06 11.4140731707 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.06136585366 94% => OK
difficult_words: 29.0 40.7170731707 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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