The plans below show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.Summarise the Information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The plans below show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.
Summarise the Information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

These 2 given pictures illustrate the current university sports centre map and the proposed layout for this coming development which portrayed many changed and improvements.
On overall, the indoor structure of current sports centre will remain pretty much the same after improvement while the key change is the outdoor areas. Current 2 outdoor courts will be demolished and replaced by extended building, containing various facilities for users. As a result, the size of new sports centre will be doubled that of the current one.
Now, university's sports centre consists of 2 main parts, main hall and outdoor courts. In the main hall, there is a reception at the entrance of the building. On the left of reception, there is a door to a changing room, connected to a 25-meter-pool in the middle of the hall. Moreover, seating is located in the right of the pool. Lastly, there is a gym at the end of the building. If you walk outside the sports centre, you can find 2 outdoor courts, one on the west and another on the east.
Under a development plan, the main hall will be extended on both left wing and right wing, replacing the outdoor courts. The facilities inside the hall will remain the same but the gym will be enlarged. On the right wing, there will be a new sports hall, a changing room, two dance studios, and a cafe. In addition, on the left wing, a new leisure pool will be built with another changing room and a sports shop will be available on the left of reception.

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 242, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
... On the right wing, there will be a new sports hall, a changing room, two dance studio...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, lastly, moreover, while, in addition, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 7.0 171% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 1.00243902439 998% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 33.7804878049 95% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.97073170732 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1223.0 965.302439024 127% => OK
No of words: 263.0 196.424390244 134% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65019011407 4.92477711251 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02706775958 3.73543355544 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56881183771 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 126.0 106.607317073 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.479087452471 0.547539520022 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 357.3 283.868780488 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 3.36585365854 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 8.94146341463 157% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.6339095554 43.030603864 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.3571428571 112.824112599 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7857142857 22.9334400587 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.14285714286 5.23603664747 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.09268292683 293% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16389898513 0.215688989381 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0647825599825 0.103423049105 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0564253158983 0.0843802449381 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105461020216 0.15604864568 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00784775258329 0.0819641961636 10% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 13.2329268293 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 61.2550243902 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.3012195122 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.69 11.4140731707 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.35 8.06136585366 91% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 40.7170731707 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.4329268293 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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