In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry.
Why is this the case?
What can be done about this problem?
Why do some developed countries, where food production exceeded domestic consumption, still face the starvation issue? Many experts and economists still cannot figure the ultimate solution for the this problem. Although some argue that the problem caused by the inefficient farming and distribution system, in my opinion, I would say that capitalism is the key of this issue. In this essay, I will discuss and solidify my position as well as propose a recommendation from my point of view.
Obviously, economy plays a big part in indicating how wealth a nation is. Even though impressive nominal figures can lure us to be optimistic on the overall economic progress, they does not reflect the actual living condition of individuals in a country. China, for example, is the country where GDP has been increasing every year, over decades, and most of the world billionaire investors are Chinese businessmen. On the contrary, being excited by the growth, we overlooked many poor suburban Chinese who live in the horrible living condition which we could have never imagined. These people work so hard that they get sick, or some may be injured and become disabled, while they hardly earn enough to make a living. Taken advantages by entrepreneurs, most of the workers around the world still suffer from starvation and cannot afford even basic healthcare services. Capitalism, therefore, causes a big income gap, leading to unfair treatments and lack of equal right to access resources in the society.
In the light of the problem, how can we resolve and improve living conditions of these people? One of the most successful strategy to deal with this problem is the Fair Trade. Fair Trade has been implemented in many countries, such as, Ethiopia, where they suffered from poverty and slave-like treatment by rich investors. The most effective case, for instance, is coffee plantation in Ethiopia. In the past, many Ethiopian farmers overworked the whole day while selling price of their products was hardly covered the cost and manpower in the production processes. However, after people have been aware of this practice, many major coffee houses offered those farmers to buy raw coffee beans from them at fair price, resulting in the better life of Ethiopian. Buying directly or fairly from producers, thus, is one way to alleviate the problem.
In conclusion, starvation will continue endlessly as long as people have not concerned about this issue, regardless how much foods we can produce. Therefore, it is vital that we should take actions to help others and improve our sustainable community for everyone.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 194, Rule ID: DT_DT[2]
Message: Maybe you need to remove the second determiner so that only 'the' or 'this' is left.
Suggestion: the; this
...cannot figure the ultimate solution for the this problem. Although some argue that the p...
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Line 2, column 181, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'do'
Suggestion: do
... on the overall economic progress, they does not reflect the actual living condition...
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Line 2, column 837, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to even'
Suggestion: to even
...uffer from starvation and cannot afford even basic healthcare services. Capitalism, ...
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Line 4, column 121, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...cerned about this issue, regardless how much foods we can produce. Therefore, it is ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, look, may, so, still, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as well as, in my opinion, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2188.0 1615.20841683 135% => OK
No of words: 424.0 315.596192385 134% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16037735849 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72693326016 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 263.0 176.041082164 149% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.620283018868 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 684.0 506.74238477 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.6252645042 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.4 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.15 7.06120827912 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221255127589 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0598088953958 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0479966529464 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124841135099 0.151304729494 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.031099129549 0.056905535591 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.33 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 78.4519038076 159% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.