At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

Essay topics:

At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.
Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

Population aging has been always one of the crucial factors affecting the economic development of a nation. For some countries with a higher number of young adults than that of senior citizens, people doubt about whether or not the overwhelming of young population can bring about more merits than demerits. In my viewpoint, I strongly believe that the benefits of this phenomenon exceed its handicaps.

Firstly, countries having young population generally witness the fast economic growth. This is partly because youngsters are likely to quickly learn and master the latest technological advances in any particular field and then apply the new knowledge to reality while working or studying. This, eventually, promotes the progression of each field in an economy, thereby stimulating the economic growth. Furthermore, good health is also an advantage of young people in the working age group. With good health, those people can work in a long period of time with high productivity and this is able to contribute the development of economy as a whole.

Notwithstanding the benefits, skeptics of the overwhelming benefits of this situation argue that the lack of experience and specialized skills of young people in the working age group can decrease effectiveness of any work they involve. Nevertheless, these skeptics may forget that young workers are fast learners, they have the capability of quickly mastering new knowledge in a short period of time and this capability can offset those shortcomings. In addition, the young are also very flexible and can easily adapt to new changes in the global society and economy.

For the forgoing discussions, it is clear that countries having a higher number of young adults that that of senior citizens can enjoy many advantages that promote the economic development.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, may, nevertheless, so, then, while, in addition, in my view

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 1.00243902439 698% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.15609756098 253% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 22.0 5.60731707317 392% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 33.7804878049 110% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 3.97073170732 227% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1536.0 965.302439024 159% => OK
No of words: 288.0 196.424390244 147% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33333333333 4.92477711251 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 3.73543355544 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91943486361 2.65546596893 110% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 106.607317073 146% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.541666666667 0.547539520022 99% => OK
syllable_count: 476.1 283.868780488 168% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.45097560976 117% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 1.53170731707 392% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.4926829268 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.0044547394 43.030603864 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.0 112.824112599 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 22.9334400587 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.25 5.23603664747 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 3.70975609756 243% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196403947635 0.215688989381 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0706241862538 0.103423049105 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0458928508887 0.0843802449381 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125828000637 0.15604864568 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0287127029114 0.0819641961636 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.2329268293 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 61.2550243902 63% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.3012195122 134% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 11.4140731707 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.06136585366 114% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 40.7170731707 196% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.4329268293 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.9970731707 105% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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