The table below shows shares of companies advertising expenditure in different media sectors in 3 countries australia Vietnam Japan in 2005

Essay topics:

The table below shows shares of companies advertising expenditure in different media sectors in 3 countries (australia, Vietnam, Japan) in 2005

The chart illustrates the proportion of four distinct kinds of mass media used by businesses in Australia, Viet Nam, Japan in the year 2005

It was notable that the largest proportion of advertising spending in each country went on television. On the other hand, The Internet was seemed to be less popular than others to advertise the products.

As can be seen from the table, Companies in Japan poured most of the money into TV advertising service, this figure was doubling that in Australia with only 31%. In comparison with this category, the percentage of expense on the newspaper was quite low in all countries with Vietnam having the most significant figure at 29% and the lowest belonged to Japan at 16%

Out of the less well-liked media, The Internet was witnessed a considerably lower percentage than any kind of public communication in each country at around 4%. Meanwhile, Viet Nam and Australia had the same number of their consumption on the radio with 21% while this figure for Japan was 7% lower compared to 2 other countries at just 14%

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Average: 6.9 (12 votes)
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IELTS Writing Task I - IELTS Academic

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, well, while, kind of, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 6.8 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 33.7804878049 107% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 893.0 965.302439024 93% => OK
No of words: 181.0 196.424390244 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93370165746 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.66791821706 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73390799455 2.65546596893 103% => OK
Unique words: 110.0 106.607317073 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.60773480663 0.547539520022 111% => OK
syllable_count: 264.6 283.868780488 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 8.94146341463 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 36.0 22.4926829268 160% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 92.1055915784 43.030603864 214% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 178.6 112.824112599 158% => OK
Words per sentence: 36.2 22.9334400587 158% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.4 5.23603664747 180% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18841257936 0.215688989381 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103159466792 0.103423049105 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0459200004703 0.0843802449381 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11525378419 0.15604864568 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0270041130633 0.0819641961636 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.9 13.2329268293 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.4 61.2550243902 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 10.3012195122 157% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.91 11.4140731707 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.09 8.06136585366 113% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 40.7170731707 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.4329268293 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.4 10.9970731707 149% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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