The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. (This is an answer written by a candidate who achieved a Band 7 score.)
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The 2 maps provided reveal the same island while the first one is before and the second is after the construction for tourism.
It is evident when comparing the two maps, there are considerable changes after this development. Not only a lot of facilities are constructed on the island, but also the sea is used for activities. Starring at the first map, before development, a huge island with the beach on the west. There are a few trees spread out in the island. The total land of the island is approximately 250 metres.
Moving onto the second map, there are a lot of buildings on the island. There are two areas of accommodation, one locates in the west near the beach which are now renovated for swimming and people can go there by following footpath, while the other is in the centre of the island. Between them, there is a restaurant in the north and a central reception, which is surrounded by a vehicle track. This vehicle track also leads to the pier where people can go for sailing in the south sea of the island.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, second, so, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 7.0 200% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 33.7804878049 80% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 846.0 965.302439024 88% => OK
No of words: 186.0 196.424390244 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.54838709677 4.92477711251 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.69299088775 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61765575135 2.65546596893 99% => OK
Unique words: 99.0 106.607317073 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.532258064516 0.547539520022 97% => OK
syllable_count: 264.6 283.868780488 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.6281597069 43.030603864 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.6 112.824112599 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6 22.9334400587 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5 5.23603664747 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.09268292683 220% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.159794537707 0.215688989381 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0671698820706 0.103423049105 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0413448923003 0.0843802449381 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122710263784 0.15604864568 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.039367787523 0.0819641961636 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 13.2329268293 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 61.2550243902 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.3012195122 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.11 11.4140731707 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.42 8.06136585366 92% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 40.7170731707 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.4329268293 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 11.0658536585 63% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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