The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts illustrate the percentage breakdown of one university students in England that could speak languages other than English in 2000 and 2010. Overall, during the decade, a considerable proportion of students were able to speak Spanish, while the least portion of these students could speak German.
First of all, it can be seen from the charts that the rate of students who could not speak other language decreased to a half from 20% to 10% throughout the surveyed period. Similarly, students speaking French only as an additional language also shrank its share from 15% to 10%, whereas ...
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flaws:
1. the subject of sentences keeps similar, look:
'a considerable proportion of students were able to speak Spanish'
'the percentages of one British university’s undergraduates '
'the percentage of students'
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2. better not to repeat words, like:
By contrast, the percentage of students speaking Spanish only increased from 30% to 35%, which continually accounting for the most significant composition in the total. The same trend could also be viewed in the groups of students speaking another language and two other languages, with both of them increased by 5% between 2000 and 2010.
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suggested style:
Students who were able to speak another language which is different from English, Spanish, French, and German rose 5% from 10% to 15% after 10 years. In the similar trend, the proportions of British students who could speak two other languages were getting larger by the rise of 5% in the period 2000-2010.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 6 15
No. of Words: 168 250
No. of Characters: 815 1200
No. of Different Words: 95 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.6 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.851 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.595 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 55 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 44 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 34 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 19 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 3.786 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.53 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.762 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.203 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 5
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These figures represent the percentage difference between students who speak languages other than English in 2000 and 2010. In the following paragraphs, I will state clearly these changes.
Firstly, these charts tell that there are 20 students who speak only English in 2000 and this number became 10 students in 2010.
Concerning other languages, in 2000, the number of students who speak French only was 15 which is 15% of the total number of students. On the other hand, the only French-speaking students decreased by 5% in 2010 to be 10 students.
Surprisingly, there's no change in the German-speaking students. they remain the same in 2000 and 2010 with a number of 10 students.
In contrast, students who speak Spanish only were higher in 2010 than in 2000. There is 35% of students in 2010 speaking Spanish while they were only 30% in 2000.
Moving to students who speak another language besides English. In 2000, there were 15 students only, while in 2010, they became 20.
Finally, the multilingual students, there were only 10 students in 2010 and increased in 2010 to be 15 students who speak two languages other than English.
To sum up, from the given charts, there's an observable change in the number of students who speak more than language between 2000 and 2010.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, similarly, so, whereas, while, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.48453608247 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 32.9175257732 18% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 26.3917525773 117% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 848.0 937.175257732 90% => OK
No of words: 168.0 206.0 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04761904762 4.54256449028 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.60020574368 3.78020617076 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5888683298 2.54303337028 102% => OK
Unique words: 97.0 127.690721649 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.577380952381 0.622605031667 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 231.3 290.88556701 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 9.13402061856 11% => OK
Article: 4.0 0.824742268041 485% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 12.6804123711 47% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 16.3608247423 171% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 10.5303793326 44.8134815571 23% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 141.333333333 76.5299724578 185% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0 16.8248392259 166% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 4.34317383033 230% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 2.54639175258 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 7.41237113402 40% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286721143825 0.216113520407 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.158067141928 0.0766984524023 206% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0918296656697 0.0603063233224 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207216546017 0.12726935374 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0939378475096 0.0580467560999 162% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 8.37731958763 196% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 70.7449484536 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 7.45979381443 158% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 8.71597938144 141% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 7.59969072165 107% => OK
difficult_words: 33.0 41.2886597938 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 8.62886597938 156% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 8.54432989691 154% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 8.15463917526 172% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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