During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.
Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter
remind him when and where you met
tell him what kind of job you are interested in
say why you think you would be suitable for the job
Hi John,
I am Harry and I hope you remembered me as we accompanied each other in the flight on 1st of june from Boston to New York. I am writing this letter, to contact for an opportunity in your restaurants as was suggested by you.
As I told you during our journey that I am working as a technology consultant at XYZ organisation as a technical lead. I am fortunate enough to have an experience of 11 years working with various domains like banking and finance, health care and hotel management just to mention a few. I recall that while our discussion you highlighted that your business needs a technological architecture so that your team can manage it in an organized way and take it to the next level.
I would like to ask that if you still have that position open, I would definitely like to be a part of your esteemed business.
this will be least to add that in overall carrier, I have gained major part of experience and knowledge in handling hotel management projects with sometimes responsible for managing a team of 20 resources. I can assure you that having me in your team will be beneficial for your business not just financially but in expansion of the same too.
I have enclosed my résumé with this letter for detailed view of my experience and education. hope to hear from you soon and I can be reached at abc12@gmail.com or at 222-222-2222 anytime during the week.
Thanks
Your sincerely
harry
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
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Suggestion: This
...e a part of your esteemed business. this will be least to add that in overall ca...
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Suggestion: Hope
...ed view of my experience and education. hope to hear from you soon and I can be reac...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, still, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 5.05154639175 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.03092783505 264% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 47.0 32.9175257732 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 26.3917525773 144% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 3.85567010309 259% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1182.0 937.175257732 126% => OK
No of words: 255.0 206.0 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.63529411765 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99608801488 3.78020617076 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88706830517 2.54303337028 114% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 127.690721649 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560784313725 0.622605031667 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 369.0 290.88556701 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 16.3608247423 141% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 45.8477538046 44.8134815571 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.454545455 76.5299724578 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1818181818 16.8248392259 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.27272727273 4.34317383033 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171929208111 0.216113520407 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0740621925578 0.0766984524023 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0542175366904 0.0603063233224 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0988520114032 0.12726935374 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0365051970577 0.0580467560999 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 8.37731958763 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 70.7449484536 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 7.45979381443 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.93 8.71597938144 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 7.59969072165 108% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 41.2886597938 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 8.54432989691 131% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 64.606741573 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.75 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.