During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter-

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During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.
Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter
- remind him when and where you met
- tell him what kind of job you are interested in
- say why you think you would be suitable for the job

Dear Sir,
I am sadhana ,we met the last month in a plane journey from Delhi to Mumbai .I am writing this letter to tell you that I really want to work in your chain restaurant, because I am not working at the movement and I need some work to do.and fulfill my daily requirement through this job.

I have two years experience as a receptionist ,It is the Italian restaurant very famous in Delhi.I have good communication skill as well as have a good personality .I am also capable to take all responsibilities as a receptionist in our restuarant.if you will choose me to work at this position.I am very hard-working person and I will be giving you the best benefits from my side.

I am too much interested to do work in your chain restaurant.I hope you will giving me a chance to work with you.I am waiting for your positive response .I will wish, you would have giving me this golden opportunity to solve my economic problem.Thank you.

Yours faithfully,
Sadhana.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ted to do work in your chain restaurant.I hope you will giving me a chance to wor...
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Suggestion: Thank
...pportunity to solve my economic problem.Thank you. Yours faithfully, Sadhana.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, really, so, well, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.48453608247 27% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 32.9175257732 118% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 26.3917525773 76% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 803.0 937.175257732 86% => OK
No of words: 174.0 206.0 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.61494252874 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.63192868298 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96086354091 2.54303337028 116% => OK
Unique words: 106.0 127.690721649 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.609195402299 0.622605031667 98% => OK
syllable_count: 251.1 290.88556701 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.13402061856 153% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 12.6804123711 32% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 43.0 16.3608247423 263% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 131.07631365 44.8134815571 292% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 200.75 76.5299724578 262% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 43.5 16.8248392259 259% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 9.5 4.34317383033 219% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 21.0 2.54639175258 825% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169295810598 0.216113520407 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106153100876 0.0766984524023 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0520028390275 0.0603063233224 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126853300084 0.12726935374 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0455188210056 0.0580467560999 78% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 22.0 8.37731958763 263% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 70.7449484536 63% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 3.82989690722 339% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.7 7.45979381443 237% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 10.35 8.71597938144 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 7.59969072165 113% => OK
difficult_words: 31.0 41.2886597938 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 29.0 8.62886597938 336% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 19.2 8.54432989691 225% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 29.0 8.15463917526 356% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.