During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter*

Essay topics:

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.
Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter
* remind him when and where you met
* tell him what kind of job you are interested in
* say why you think you would be suitable for the job

Dear Mr Ryan Lee,

How are you? Hope you remember me since it has been a long time. Let me refresh your memory. We meet on July 4th, on the plane journey from Singapore to India, where we were seated next to each other and got chatting about our dream and hobbies. During the course of our conversation, you mentioned that you are the owner of a chain of restaurants and advised me to contact you in case I want to be employed in any one of the restaurants.

Fortunately the timing could not be right as I am interested in applying for the sous chef position available in Singapore. Let me provide a gist of my myself. Mostly, I am passionate about cooking, particularly baking and your restaurant provides the right opportunities for armatures to learn the trade and flourish in their careers. Moreover, I am interested in developing my skills under the guidance of celebrity chef Gordan Ramsey who will be based in your kitchen for a year.

Keeping all the aforementioned points in mind, I think I am the most suited because I possess amazing knife skills and I am also comfortable to work in shifts and during public holidays, which are the key requirements of the job. Although I do not have any prior experience, I can assure you that I will not slack at work.

I look forward to your reply and hope you consider my situation favorably.

Your faithfully,
Mary Smith

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 247, Rule ID: DURING_THE_COURSE_OF[1]
Message: Use simply 'During'.
Suggestion: During
...t chatting about our dream and hobbies. During the course of our conversation, you mentioned that yo...
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Line 5, column 82, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sous'' or 'sou's'?
Suggestion: sous'; sou's
... as I am interested in applying for the sous chef position available in Singapore. L...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, moreover, so, i think

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 32.9175257732 122% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 26.3917525773 125% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1141.0 937.175257732 122% => OK
No of words: 247.0 206.0 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.61943319838 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96437052324 3.78020617076 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76584303992 2.54303337028 109% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 127.690721649 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.623481781377 0.622605031667 100% => OK
syllable_count: 357.3 290.88556701 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.9081327258 44.8134815571 149% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.7692307692 76.5299724578 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 16.8248392259 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.84615384615 4.34317383033 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 7.41237113402 148% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206691453443 0.216113520407 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0664421248057 0.0766984524023 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.067565075354 0.0603063233224 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114609747272 0.12726935374 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0878598689726 0.0580467560999 151% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 8.37731958763 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 70.7449484536 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 7.45979381443 111% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 8.71597938144 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 7.59969072165 108% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 41.2886597938 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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