During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. you talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.
Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter-
Remind him when and where you met
tell him what kind of job you are interested in
say why you think you would be suitable for the job
Dear Mr. John,
I am writing in regards to the possibility of a bookkeeper job in Brampton restaurant.
First of all, I would like to say that it was a great pleasure to meet you at Tokyo international airport while coming back to Toronto. I remember when I saw you first time in the ANA lounge while having dinner.
As I mentioned to you that I have completed my graduate certificate program in Accountancy from Seneca college recently. Thus, I am interested to start a job as a bookkeeper to gain experience in this stream.
Moreover, I have worked as an accountant in Japan for a couple of years. So, I am Familiar with various duties which are required to work as a bookkeeper, such as filing ITR forms, data entries, and bank reconciliations. What is more, I have strong communication skills and other traits, for instance, leadership and co-operation.
Therefore, I hope that I would be ideal for the aforementioned job. I look forward to hearing from you soon.
Yours Sincerely,
Harry
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 14, Rule ID: IN_REGARD_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'regarding' or 'with regard to'.
Suggestion: regarding; with regard to
Dear Mr. John, I am writing in regards to the possibility of a bookkeeper job in ...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... the ANA lounge while having dinner. As I mentioned to you that I have complete...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, look, moreover, so, therefore, thus, while, for instance, such as, first of all, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 32.9175257732 73% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 26.3917525773 87% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 843.0 937.175257732 90% => OK
No of words: 173.0 206.0 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87283236994 4.54256449028 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.62669911048 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11287642959 2.54303337028 122% => OK
Unique words: 116.0 127.690721649 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.670520231214 0.622605031667 108% => OK
syllable_count: 258.3 290.88556701 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.3513615646 44.8134815571 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.6363636364 76.5299724578 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7272727273 16.8248392259 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.45454545455 4.34317383033 218% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.112325497432 0.216113520407 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0421264382353 0.0766984524023 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0309563594827 0.0603063233224 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0617153314922 0.12726935374 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0327182088013 0.0580467560999 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 8.37731958763 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 70.7449484536 91% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 7.45979381443 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.67 8.71597938144 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 7.59969072165 106% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 41.2886597938 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.