During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.
Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter
remind him when and where you met
tell him what kind of job you are interested in
say why you think you would be suitable for the job
Dear Mr. Philippe,
I sat next to you in a flight from Dubai to Melbourne on 18th July. You offered me your business card by seeing my enthusiasm to work for a restaurant. I am writing to remind you about possible job which you offered me during our journey.
It was nice talking to you and you advised me to contact you whenever I would like to work in a restaurant. I would like to tell you that I have completed CPA and having eight years of experience as assistant finance manager two years of which are in a restaurant. Currently I am working in construction sector and would like to switch my job. I am willing to work in hospitality sector. I am looking for a role of Assistant manager finance or finance manager in your restaurant.
I have vast experience in the field of account and finance and it will benefit your business. I request you to please consider my profile for this role.
Please let me know if you require further information. I have enclosed my detailed Curriculum Vital.
Yours Sincerely,
Muhammad Zubair
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 13, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...inance manager in your restaurant. I have vast experience in the field of ac...
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Line 13, column 95, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ance and it will benefit your business. I request you to please consider my profi...
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Line 17, column 102, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... enclosed my detailed Curriculum Vital. Yours Sincerely, Muhammad Zubair
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, thus, mind you
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.48453608247 27% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 32.9175257732 115% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 26.3917525773 114% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.85567010309 207% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 875.0 937.175257732 93% => OK
No of words: 186.0 206.0 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70430107527 4.54256449028 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.69299088775 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75181122624 2.54303337028 108% => OK
Unique words: 104.0 127.690721649 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.559139784946 0.622605031667 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 270.9 290.88556701 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 16.3608247423 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.3799016068 44.8134815571 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 67.3076923077 76.5299724578 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.3076923077 16.8248392259 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.84615384615 4.34317383033 43% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 7.41237113402 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222181363515 0.216113520407 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0830008915275 0.0766984524023 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.081156910426 0.0603063233224 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138187288799 0.12726935374 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.077530358236 0.0580467560999 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.9 8.37731958763 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 70.7449484536 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.39 8.71597938144 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 7.59969072165 101% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 41.2886597938 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 8.62886597938 104% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 8.54432989691 89% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.