an item of clothing you purchased but found some issues with it once you returned home.1-Describe what the item was2-What were the issues3-What do you expect the store manager to do

Essay topics:

an item of clothing you purchased but found some issues with it once you returned home.
1- Describe what the item was
2- What were the issues
3- What do you expect the store manager to do

Dear Sir,
I ma writing to you this letter concerning a complain about a suit I recently purchased from your store. Let me describe the situation in more details, on Wednesday October the 10th, I procure a formal suit from your store’s main branch. It was black tuxedo suit from your latest collection.

After I tried the suit size the outfits employee asked me to hand him the suit to wrap it before payment. However, after arriving to my home I was devastated to find out that he damaged the suit by wrapping it unprofessionally. Furthermore, he pinned the receipt to the pants, resulting to torn in the fabric.

Regarding this situation, I am requesting a full refund for my money, or else getting me a new undamaged suit. In addition to that, your store has a respected reputation and such unprofessional accident should be permitted, and the careless employee should be suspended from his job.
Looking forward to hearing from your side as soon as possible.

Your faithful,
Jack Smith

Votes
Average: 1.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 10, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Sir, I ma writing to you this letter concerni...
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Line 2, column 44, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...a writing to you this letter concerning a complain about a suit I recently purchased from ...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...do suit from your latest collection. After I tried the suit size the outfits emplo...
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Line 4, column 33, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'outfits'' or 'outfit's'?
Suggestion: outfits'; outfit's
...ion. After I tried the suit size the outfits employee asked me to hand him the suit ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, look, regarding, so, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 32.9175257732 88% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 26.3917525773 95% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 871.0 937.175257732 93% => OK
No of words: 171.0 206.0 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09356725146 4.54256449028 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.61617157096 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89627816488 2.54303337028 114% => OK
Unique words: 114.0 127.690721649 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.666666666667 0.622605031667 107% => OK
syllable_count: 247.5 290.88556701 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 1.44329896907 346% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.031816923 44.8134815571 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.1 76.5299724578 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1 16.8248392259 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4 4.34317383033 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 7.41237113402 40% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0484665410032 0.216113520407 22% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.018339664605 0.0766984524023 24% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0324347954197 0.0603063233224 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0252541910963 0.12726935374 20% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0304908679548 0.0580467560999 53% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 8.37731958763 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 70.7449484536 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 8.71597938144 137% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 7.59969072165 110% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 41.2886597938 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 8.62886597938 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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