More children in developed countries are becoming overweight. This is a serious problem for wealthy countries.
Discuss some causes and effects of this problem. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
It is without a doubt that Obesity levels are increasing among people around the world. It became noticeable that obesity levels between children has increased. Specially, in rich countries. This phenomenon is exacerbating for many reasons. Mainly, the expansion of technology in such wealthy countries. Such as, television, mobile phones and video games which they become addicted on. Resulting in, less exercises and a sedentary lifestyle for their youngsters.
First, one of the most hazardous causes of creating an overweighed child, is spending most of their times on the expensive electrical devices that their wealthy parents are buying for them. Such as, mobile phones, play stations and computer video games. As a result, their daily routine lacks effort and exercising leading to gaining weight excessively. For instance, if we compared the life of children in developing countries, where they spend most of their free time working or creating simple games. They turn out to have a healthier body without obesity problem. Unlike the comfortable life of wealthier families’ youth.
Secondly, the variety of fast food restaurants which many parents in developed countries are counting on for feeding their families. They prefer purchasing and consuming junk or convenience food because it is available, affordable and of course more delicious. Making it more persuading that the other alternative healthy food. Consequently, eating fast food frequently leads to Obesity and other severe health problems such as, diabetes. For example, living in such countries force both the parents to work for an extended period of time to afford their families, leaving them no time to cook fresh meals for their children.
To conclude, the spreading of obesity around children specially those on developed countries, is a major problem threatening their lives. Although, these countries are experiencing a high level of welfare, it has afflicting their children’s lives negatively. By combining the two causes mentioned above together we found these children are spending most of their time on electrical devices, furthermore, digesting food saturated with fats and sugar. Normally such lifestyle will affect their health resulting in obesity and many other diseases.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, of course, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1941.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 347.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.59365994236 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84880484178 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.587896253602 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 588.6 506.74238477 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.6823383055 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.2272727273 106.682146367 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7727272727 20.7667163134 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.36363636364 7.06120827912 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169322721328 0.244688304435 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0509339871343 0.084324248473 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0425619715009 0.0667982634062 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110131100564 0.151304729494 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.019745532217 0.056905535591 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 50.2224549098 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.85 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.43 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 78.4519038076 141% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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