A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money either to sponsor a local children s sports team for two years or to pay for two open air concerts It has asked for feedback from the general public Write a letter to the company

Essay topics:

A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.

Write a letter to the company. In your letter

• Describe he benefits of sponsoring the sport team

• Summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts

• Say how you think the company should spend the money

Dear sir or madam

I am writing this letter to express my appreciation about your great decision on devoting money for improving our neighbourhood satisfaction. I believe that, due to these kinds of activities other companies will be encourage to doing something like these too. You know that in this part of city the rate of young people is more than older and they need to do some Sports in their leisure time. It is obvious that is not only playing sport help them to be healthier and more practical but also it helps them to avoid of some narcotic materials which are destroyed them. Moreover, if you accept to pay the expense in some sports such as football, of course they follow them with more attention, and I am sure that after a while they can obtain the first place of local champions. They can improve their skills and talents and continue their career as a professional sportsman in our national team. On the other hand, by holding some amazing and exciting programs such as concert the rate of fun and satisfaction will be growth among the citizenry. I mean that by observing open-air concert in public area all people poor and rich, young and old, men and women, can enjoy it and they find their self in equal level by others. In addition, scientists believe that if in some area people feel more happiness and good luck, they will commit less crime. Therefore, allocated certain budget on open-air concerts can help us to have healthier and happier Society.

I prefer you can organise one charity organisation and on that office your staff can handle these programs by your money and even many other rich people donations.

I would be grateful if you continue this way for a long time. If you need more information or any helps please feel free and send me email on a.m.nazaripoor@gmail.com or call me on 09123456789.

Yours Faithfully,

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Average: 9.1 (2 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 18, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear sir or madam I am writing this letter to express my a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, so, therefore, while, i mean, in addition, of course, such as, you know, in the first place, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 4.92783505155 244% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 20.0 5.05154639175 396% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.03092783505 264% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 51.0 32.9175257732 155% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 26.3917525773 144% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.85567010309 182% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1548.0 937.175257732 165% => OK
No of words: 325.0 206.0 158% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76307692308 4.54256449028 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 3.78020617076 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7104426591 2.54303337028 107% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 127.690721649 149% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.584615384615 0.622605031667 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 465.3 290.88556701 160% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 1.44329896907 277% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 16.3608247423 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 47.0887134967 44.8134815571 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.076923077 76.5299724578 156% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 16.8248392259 149% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.9230769231 4.34317383033 251% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 7.41237113402 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.120322073743 0.216113520407 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0427234715774 0.0766984524023 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0315578311439 0.0603063233224 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0702156391692 0.12726935374 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0244425380832 0.0580467560999 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 8.37731958763 161% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 70.7449484536 89% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 7.45979381443 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 8.71597938144 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 7.59969072165 104% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 41.2886597938 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 8.62886597938 156% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 8.54432989691 140% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 8.15463917526 172% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 81.4606741573 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.25 Out of 9
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