A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.
describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
say how you think the company should spend the money
Dear Sir or Madame,
My name is Phil Collins and I am writing to you in regards to the current feedback received from the general public for the money to be spent in our community.
I would like to emphasize that sponsoring the sports team would bring some benefits, such as new uniforms to the team , maintenance to our small stadium and most important is to have your brand in our uniforms.
On the other hand, we have people requesting the local authorities if they can bring open-air concerts more often. There are open areas close to the stadium that can be used for his can of events. There are plenty of benefits, but I would like to summarize by saying that our local cafes, restaurants and some other businesses would get an extra income.
It is important to mention that my thinking on it, is that your company should spend the money on sponsoring our sport team due to the expectation for them to win provincial games and get into the next category level, where your brand will be shown to the whole country.
Sincerely Yours
Phil Collins
Mobile 874839364
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 49, Rule ID: IN_REGARD_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'regarding' or 'with regard to'.
Suggestion: regarding; with regard to
...is Phil Collins and I am writing to you in regards to the current feedback received from the ...
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Line 3, column 102, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
... the current feedback received from the general public for the money to be spent in our commun...
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Line 5, column 118, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...nefits, such as new uniforms to the team , maintenance to our small stadium and mo...
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Line 15, column 17, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... Yours Phil Collins Mobile 874839364
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.48453608247 120% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 4.92783505155 183% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.03092783505 198% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 32.9175257732 79% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 26.3917525773 99% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 900.0 937.175257732 96% => OK
No of words: 191.0 206.0 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71204188482 4.54256449028 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.71756304063 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41933670748 2.54303337028 95% => OK
Unique words: 117.0 127.690721649 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.612565445026 0.622605031667 98% => OK
syllable_count: 269.1 290.88556701 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.13402061856 44% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 12.6804123711 55% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 16.3608247423 165% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 71.0104907455 44.8134815571 158% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.571428571 76.5299724578 168% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2857142857 16.8248392259 162% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.57142857143 4.34317383033 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230673757582 0.216113520407 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0958216835277 0.0766984524023 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0547116590482 0.0603063233224 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134836253735 0.12726935374 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0396653152897 0.0580467560999 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 8.37731958763 172% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 70.7449484536 86% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 7.45979381443 154% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 8.71597938144 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 7.59969072165 106% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 41.2886597938 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 8.62886597938 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 8.54432989691 150% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 8.15463917526 159% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.