A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money either to sponsor a local children s sports team for two years or to pay for two open air concerts It has asked for feedback from the general public Write a letter to the company

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A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.
Write a letter to the company. In your letter
describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
say how you think the company should spend the money

Dear Sir/ Madam,
I am writing to provide the feedback on the benefits of investing money to sponsor the sports team and the concerts in my area. I would suggest the better way to spend your money in this respect.

I recently came across this news published in the local magazine dated 21/04/21. My excitement was sky-high after reading this breakthrough as I can see a better prospective for our local sports and art club. our football team has been considered one of the top football teams in the city. This sponsorship will definitely help members to come up and proof their talent at international level.

Secondly, I would say that sponsorship for two concerts arrangement would be a better opportunity for the citizens to intermingle and catch up some news about neighbouring societies. It will give them a chance to relax in a safer environment and warmup themselves under one-roof. Furthermore, it would certainly raise the position of the community at national level.

As a suggestion, I would recommend that your company should invest money in the sports team and one concert, at first. By getting the feedback from public, and participation in the first concert, the investment in the second concert should be planned accordingly. In this way, the money should be spent wisely in a better way.

I hope my feedback will help you to spend money sensibly.

Yours faithfully,

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 210, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Our
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, first, furthermore, second, secondly, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 4.92783505155 244% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 32.9175257732 85% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 26.3917525773 121% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.85567010309 182% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1168.0 937.175257732 125% => OK
No of words: 233.0 206.0 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01287553648 4.54256449028 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.90696013833 3.78020617076 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85794374904 2.54303337028 112% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 127.690721649 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.575107296137 0.622605031667 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 342.9 290.88556701 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.13402061856 131% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.349925351 44.8134815571 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.8461538462 76.5299724578 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9230769231 16.8248392259 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.07692307692 4.34317383033 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 7.41237113402 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251033649915 0.216113520407 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0770302733311 0.0766984524023 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0603354551245 0.0603063233224 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132066607972 0.12726935374 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0492813799991 0.0580467560999 85% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 8.37731958763 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 70.7449484536 89% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 7.45979381443 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 8.71597938144 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 7.59969072165 109% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 41.2886597938 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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