Last month you had a holiday overseas where you stayed with some friends. They have just sent you some photos of your holiday.Write a letter to your friends. In your letter:• thank them for the photos and for the holiday• explain why you didn't write

Essay topics:

Last month you had a holiday overseas where you stayed with some friends. They have just sent you some photos of your holiday.
Write a letter to your friends. In your letter:
• thank them for the photos and for the holiday
• explain why you didn't write earlier
• invite them to come and stay with you

Hi Mary,

Thank you so much for the kind letter and lovely photographs we took on the holidays we had spent in Newyork. It was the beautiful time which all of us had spent during our holidays.

I am sorry, I could not write to you before, as the moment I had back from my holidays my mother fall sick, and she has admitted to the hospital. So I was taking care of my mother during the time she was in the hospital hence did not get back to you post-holiday trip. She has started recovering now, and hopefully, she will be back to normal in a couple of days.

You will be happy to hear that my sister got engaged recently and we have kept her wedding ceremony on 23rd, June, 2018.
She is getting married to a Software Engineer. It will be delighted if all your family members can come and attend the wedding ceremony of my elder sister and also if all of you can stay for sometimes at my house so that we can spend the time together in the way we have done in Newyork during our holidays.

Hoping to see you all on the occasion of my elder sister's wedding.

Best regards,
Vandana Mankotia

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 110, Rule ID: COMMA_MONTH_DATE[1]
Message: The comma is probably incorrect: 'June 2018'.
Suggestion: June 2018
...have kept her wedding ceremony on 23rd, June, 2018. She is getting married to a Software ...
^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, if, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 32.9175257732 109% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 26.3917525773 106% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.85567010309 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 905.0 937.175257732 97% => OK
No of words: 210.0 206.0 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.30952380952 4.54256449028 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.80675409584 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.25706750929 2.54303337028 89% => OK
Unique words: 118.0 127.690721649 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.561904761905 0.622605031667 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 279.9 290.88556701 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 16.3608247423 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.6523316672 44.8134815571 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.5 76.5299724578 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 16.8248392259 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.9 4.34317383033 44% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196301467397 0.216113520407 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0734373370595 0.0766984524023 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0668197307789 0.0603063233224 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111517191055 0.12726935374 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0363577152439 0.0580467560999 63% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 8.37731958763 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 75.54 70.7449484536 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 7.45979381443 106% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.72 8.71597938144 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.93 7.59969072165 91% => OK
difficult_words: 30.0 41.2886597938 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 8.54432989691 122% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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