The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care system in an effort to deal with the health issues involved. Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in the school curriculum. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The obesity is growing nowadays and is putting a strain on the health care system to deal with the issues involved with the health. Few of us are still thinking that the best way to cope is by introducing physical education lessons in the school and I strongly agree with this statement.
Firstly, when the schools are proving physical education to the children on a daily basis, undoubtedly they are trying to keep the children fit. The children should be aware of all the ill effect of obesity. If the children are aware of these things, undoubtedly, they will be informing their parents, caretaker of the same. So this way both the child, as well as his parents/Caretaker will be more alert concerning the diet they are taking. Also, children should be aware of the ill effect of obesity. These physical education lessons will help the child to lead a healthy life, thereby help our children to be a fast learner in the school.
Also, by encouraging more number of exercises and sports in the school, will help our nation also to grow. As, all of us will be motivated even though if elder people do not show interest in doing exercise daily, they will start doing it by looking at their children. So the sports in the school along with training will play an important role, in reducing weight. As once you develop this interest from your childhood, you will become so used to it that you will never feel like leaving as you grow older. So school will be playing an essential role in organizing more sports and exercises in the school. Obesity is the primary cause of disease, and due to obesity, people suffer from many disorders.
To conclude, obesity will be controlled by promoting physical educations in the school, thereby by it will reduce the number of diseases, which will occur only by gaining weight. So to stay healthy, we need to adopt the exercise and also take part in as many sports as we can, to keep ourselves free from such harmful diseases. To stay healthy, we must ensure we are eating a proper diet, and by undergoing the physical exercises.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Probable usage error. Use 'and' after 'both'.
Suggestion: and
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, look, so, still, well, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 7.85571142285 229% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1711.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 366.0 315.596192385 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67486338798 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49407461671 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 526.5 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.2069433078 49.4020404114 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.647058824 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5294117647 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.47058823529 7.06120827912 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200760533188 0.244688304435 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0722547752193 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110241779035 0.0667982634062 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173042029485 0.151304729494 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.197063608896 0.056905535591 346% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 50.2224549098 134% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 12.4159519038 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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