in today's chaotic world in which the worth of individuals is determined by their accomplishment, one thing is sure, that preparing children for the future adult life is fundamental. people may have different attitudes toward best ways of preparing their children for the future and the one which recently has attracted more attention is encouraging young children to take a part-time job. as far as I am concerned, I agree with the idea. the rationale behind my opinion is presented in the following essay.
to begin with, taking part in a part-time job can help the development of their sense of responsibility since they will experience the interactions dominating the real world. they will be given the opportunities to make mistakes which is very important in the process of practicing responsibility. my own experience is a compelling example to illustrate this. when I was a teenager, my parents sent me to my uncle mechanic to help him repair cars and get a small amount of money for my work. before that, I was barely responsible in my everyday life to the point that our relatives always blamed my parents for spoiling me. but after I started working there for about three months in summer, I became a completely different person who never gives up his urgency in doing his duties and this was because of my uncle very strict toward me in carrying out my duties at work and punished me when I made a mistake by not paying me. what i learned was to avoid mistakes and be more responsible.
second, by taking a part-time job, children will understand the difficulties of making money, because they will see that how overwhelming is to make money and therefore they will try to be less extravagant an more careful in their spendings, which is a very crucial skill in adulthood. for instance, I was very bothered when working for my uncle, because there were sometimes pieces of work which I felt overwhelmed to carry out. I always dictated myself that every penny that I make tantamounts to the hours of my life, how can I be satisfied to waste my life? this experience has taught me to work more and spend less and now I think it has been an effective factor in my current financial success as an adult.
all in all, to sum up, what I outlined above, I agree with the idea of encouraging young children to take a part-time job. I feel this way because young children can practice responsibility and because they can learn to save.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, second, so, therefore, as to, for instance, i feel, i think, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 7.48453608247 267% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 4.92783505155 203% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 5.05154639175 198% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 3.03092783505 495% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 61.0 32.9175257732 185% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 26.3917525773 227% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 3.85567010309 182% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2019.0 937.175257732 215% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 430.0 206.0 209% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69534883721 4.54256449028 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 3.78020617076 120% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82188484394 2.54303337028 111% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 127.690721649 173% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513953488372 0.622605031667 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 647.1 290.88556701 222% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.13402061856 131% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 1.83505154639 272% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 1.44329896907 346% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 12.6804123711 134% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 16.3608247423 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.8532321975 44.8134815571 156% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.764705882 76.5299724578 155% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2941176471 16.8248392259 150% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.82352941176 4.34317383033 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 2.54639175258 668% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 7.41237113402 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 1.49484536082 334% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199243935809 0.216113520407 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0660866523319 0.0766984524023 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0889116990961 0.0603063233224 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148748660525 0.12726935374 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0640864714487 0.0580467560999 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 8.37731958763 160% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 70.7449484536 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 7.45979381443 160% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.28 8.71597938144 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 7.59969072165 101% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 41.2886597938 186% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 8.62886597938 139% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 8.54432989691 140% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 8.15463917526 147% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.