nowadays, it is becoming increasingly important to identify a career that has the most potential to lead to secure and successful future since our lifespan is short and this means that it is essential to avoid making mistakes in choosing a career. in comparing the past and the present situation, some people assert that it was easier to find a more promising career in the past. however, as far as I am concerned, it is more difficult today to find a promising job than it was before. in the following essay, the rationale behind my opinion is presented.
to begin with, compared to the past, today there is a wider range of careers between which selecting the best option is a demanding job. especially, when we take account the fact that more and more people are attaining higher levels of education. as a result, in choosing a career, people often get stuck between innumerable options and this makes the decision-making process an overwhelming action. my own experience is a compelling evidence to illustrate this. 3 years ago, when I graduated from the university, I had to choose between various job options which made me spend a lot of time pondering the pros and cons of different job opportunities and as a result, I felt overwhelmed to choose one of them. on the one hand, my parents told me to work as a mason since I had learned the basics of it and since it was a well-paying job, on the other hand, I was a public health graduate and it was prestigious. moreover, there were other job options such as truck driver, shopkeeper, and paramedic which made it more and more difficult for me to choose one of them. on the contrary, in the past, people did not have these options and they chose the job of their parents.
second, people's expectations have risen today which means they often find it difficult to choose a job which not prestigious and therefore they face a quandary in selecting the most appropriate job. for example, my father always tells me that when he was younger and wanted to select a career, he did not think about the appropriateness of the jobs and what he wanted to have was simply a career through which he could support his family. in contrast, the levels of expectation are high today and in considering a job, people often look at the different properties of the job because they want to have a job which fits well in their current social situation, not merely due to the matter of survival.
all in all, to sum up, what I outlined above I strongly disagree with the statement. I feel this way because today there are more job options and because people want to have a more prestigious job.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, moreover, second, so, therefore, well, for example, i feel, in contrast, such as, as a result, on the contrary, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2169.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 470.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.61489361702 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71784755593 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.472340425532 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 686.7 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.1983302395 48.9658058833 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.588235294 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6470588235 20.6045352989 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2352941176 5.45110844103 188% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.5376344086 289% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22901163051 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0741324170667 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0577845879759 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147956338957 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0649621265126 0.0645574589148 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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