Without a doubt, the successful development of any given society depends not only on the education of very young children but also for the adults. because both groups have a deciding impact on the advancement of that society. yet, some people think one group has priority over the other. from an idealistic point of view, the governments should invest consummately in each group, however, this does not occur in reality. As far as I am concerned, I disagree with the statement for the reasons presented in the following essay.
the first and the most exquisite reason which may bear a light on this issue is that the role of the universities in the development of any given country outweighs to a high extent the role the younger children play in that country. this is in turn due to the importance of the universities in introducing new ideas and promoting the status quo through a wide range of studies in every field of science. to clarify this let me tell you my own experience which is not irrelevant to this claim. When I was in the university, I could see how students were producing new ideas and inventing novel scientific documents. every student was trying hard by reading new articles and attending seminars. as a result, our university was one of the pioneering universities in producing new sciences. on the other hand, as far as I can remember, the only thing that my classmates and I were doing was commuting between the school and our home without any scientific production.
Secondly, the more a government spends on the universities the more it can make money in the short run. Since the university students are relatively intelligent and more specific group who completed their elementary and secondary schools and are ready to serve the community, investing on this group will result in fewer expenses in terms of money and time in the part of the government. On the other hand, we can not assume certitude about whether young children will reach the same level of maturity with the same level of mastery and knowledge. For example, when we graduated from the high elementary school, roughly one-tenth of the students in our class, including me, decided to the college, the rest of the students simply dropped out of the school and joined the labor force. So, it would be fair to say the government spending on our class was not profit making. However, it would not be reasonable to ignore the fact that education is crucial for all humankind.
finally, in order to determine the priority of spending among the two mentioned groups, I think, it would be logical to adopt a scientific approach by conducting a comprehensive study addressing the statement stated above.
all in all, to sum up, what I outlined above, I do not agree with the statement, I feel this way because the universities are more science productive and because the governments can make more money by investing on the universities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, for example, i feel, as a result, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1787.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 368.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85597826087 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80698892947 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.538043478261 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 571.5 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.9746420072 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.6875 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 5.45110844103 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165133132702 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0527476020586 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0623445531618 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107414048383 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.052660073024 0.0645574589148 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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