there is no shortage of debate on the indispensable role of young people in different communities as a whole. yet, some people assume that they have no significant influence on the important decisions deciding the future of the society in general. however, critics of this idea point out to the importance of young people in every aspect of a community by various arguments. personally, I disagree with the statement for the rationale behind the ensuing paragraphs.
the first and the most exquisite reason which may flash a light on this issue is that young people have the potential and energy much more than older people, and hence they may have more effect on the decisions made in a community as a whole. they will try as hard as possible to reach the goals they have set for themselves. i think our country's 1977 Islamic revolution is a compelling example to illustrate this. i have read a lot of books and articles about our revolution, it's origins and constituents. the leader of the movement was an old religious man who did not have the essential energy to move the mass of the people to rebel against the government. it was his followers who had the vigour and energy to affect the direction in which the movement was heading on. if that young follower did not accompany their leader, I am sure the revolution was not successful.
secondly, young people are more creative than the older adults. no one can question the fact that today most of the societies are under the control of the widespread technology, young people are the ones who introduce these technologies and as a result, they have a strong effect on the fate of communities. for example, our government's intelligence minister is a young man around the age of 35 who was famous for his innovative ideas in technology and who has several inventions in electronics. now he is on the top level of the country and he decides which material people should have access to the internet, social media and official television. in addition, he is the one who the president counsels before making important decisions. so, this fact shows that young people can be very influential.
all in all, to sum up, what I outline above, I disagree with the statement. because young people have more vigorous toward making changes and because young people are more creative than the older ones.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, for example, i think, in addition, in general, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1943.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 406.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78571428571 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7154443541 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519704433498 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 626.4 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.9919554826 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.263157895 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3684210526 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.47368421053 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 5.5376344086 343% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270970409836 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.081083326618 0.076458572812 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0573602818422 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177508292369 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.071157761727 0.0645574589148 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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