A restaurant has placed an advertisement for waiters and waitresses in your local newspaper.Write a letter to the restaurant, applying for the job. In your letter:•explain what you are currently doing•describe your suitability for this area of work•

Essay topics:

A restaurant has placed an advertisement for waiters and waitresses in your local newspaper.
Write a letter to the restaurant, applying for the job. In your letter:
• explain what you are currently doing
• describe your suitability for this area of work
• say when you can attend an interview

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing in reference to the advertisement you placed in the Vancouver Observer for waiters and waitresses.

I am 19 years old and I am a part-time student at college. I have held several positions in catering outlets during my studies and, as the restaurant where I am currently employed is due to close, I am keen to find another position as soon as possible.

I have completed and passed the advanced certificate in food hygiene and am therefore familiar with the requirements of working in the catering industry. In my current job, in addition to working as a waiter, I am also responsible for counting up takings at the end of the day.

I am very reliable and trustworthy, have a friendly, outgoing personality and enjoy dealing with the public. I would be very grateful if I could be considered for the position. My employer is happy to supply a reference and I am available for interview at any time except Monday and Wednesday afternoons when I attend college.

Please do not hesitate to contact me should you have any questions.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours faithfully,

John Lee

Votes
Average: 8.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 119, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...as a waitress at different restaurants. I have worked for a Thai, Japanese and It...
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Line 4, column 265, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...erving customers and placing cutleries. I understand the importance of being poli...
^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 5.05154639175 218% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.03092783505 0% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 32.9175257732 67% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 26.3917525773 80% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1021.0 937.175257732 109% => OK
No of words: 190.0 206.0 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37368421053 4.54256449028 118% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.71268753763 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.34929190019 2.54303337028 132% => OK
Unique words: 124.0 127.690721649 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.652631578947 0.622605031667 105% => OK
syllable_count: 314.1 290.88556701 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.41237113402 120% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.7795586188 44.8134815571 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.0833333333 76.5299724578 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8333333333 16.8248392259 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.666666666667 4.34317383033 15% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.94845360825 152% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233095592439 0.216113520407 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0772799645481 0.0766984524023 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0582137540016 0.0603063233224 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106720612824 0.12726935374 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0475483579318 0.0580467560999 82% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 8.37731958763 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 70.7449484536 68% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 7.45979381443 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.57 8.71597938144 156% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.37 7.59969072165 123% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 41.2886597938 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 8.62886597938 99% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 81.4606741573 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.25 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.