Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion

Essay topics:

Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair.Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.

Sportsperson are always in limelight, sometimes because of their achievement and others time wealth and luxury lifestyle. Some sections of people think that they deserve to earn lot of money while other people disagree with it. I shall explain both views in the essay.
People who believe that sports professional should not earn quantum of money have some valid points. Firstly, race of earning the money distract their mind and sometime good sports person loose the focus and get behind in the respective sports. It has been seen that when sports person become famous and are admired by crowd then commercial company try to use their influence to endorse their products by offering hefty sum. This not only makes them rich but also raise quest to see other such endorsement for getting money, consequently, they rarely get time to practice sports they play at different level. For example, English soccer caption David Beckham rose quickly early in his career because of dexterousness in game but later on involved in money making deals and eventually did lose the place in country team. Secondly, most of the players are treated as ideal owing to their commands and skills in game but when they get money, they start to flaunt in public, resulting, people also try to live in similar fashion and adopt wrong way to earn money just to imitate the lifestyle of beloved sports person.

However, other think that players are famous and play at international level have full rights to earn the money. In most of the sports, life of the career is very short and after retirement, they become ordinary person and rarely get endorsement or other jobs. Particularly, the sports which are not so famous, most of the player goes on oblivion and face hard time to live the life. For instance, in recent news, a former international player was seen selling the vegetable on the streets in shabby conditions. Moreover, these players are treated as celebrity in their respective country and to maintain such status, money is required to earn in order to manage themselves and their staff.

In conclusion, sports professional are loved and admired by everyone because of their contribution in games. Sports person career span is short so in my view, they deserve to earn the money for living good life and after retirement period.

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Average: 5.5 (6 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in my view

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 7.48453608247 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 5.05154639175 396% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.03092783505 264% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 28.0 32.9175257732 85% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 26.3917525773 220% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 9.0 3.85567010309 233% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1936.0 937.175257732 207% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 391.0 206.0 190% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95140664962 4.54256449028 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 3.78020617076 118% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47263395366 2.54303337028 97% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 127.690721649 166% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542199488491 0.622605031667 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 593.1 290.88556701 204% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.360824742268 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 12.6804123711 126% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 16.3608247423 147% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.3197735331 44.8134815571 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.0 76.5299724578 158% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4375 16.8248392259 145% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.4375 4.34317383033 217% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.49484536082 268% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224816240009 0.216113520407 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0834192635459 0.0766984524023 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0768769145399 0.0603063233224 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159052182634 0.12726935374 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0728592602137 0.0580467560999 126% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 8.37731958763 168% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 70.7449484536 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 7.45979381443 154% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 8.71597938144 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 7.59969072165 107% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 41.2886597938 196% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 8.54432989691 136% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 8.15463917526 147% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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