Write a letter to a financial organisation that gives money to students who would like to take a part time course Write a letter to a local financial organisation In your letter give your qualifications and work experience give details about the course ex

Essay topics:

Write a letter to a financial organisation that gives money to students who would like to take a part-time course.
Write a letter to a local financial organisation. In your letter
• give your qualifications and work experience
• give details about the course
• explain how this course will help you

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to request you to inquire about student loan schemes that your bank grants for aspiring students or professionals to help them to finish their skill development courses as a part-timer.

Let me explain my situation in detail. I am Bachelor Graduate in Civil Engineering from Mumbai University and work for a construction company as a Planning Engineer with the total work experience of five years. As by profession I am working in a planning department so I need to learn advanced software skills to develop my career and do well in my work field.
The skill development course I am looking to enroll in to, offers comprehensive three-month course intended to enhance my Planning software skills. It includes Primavera P6, Microsoft Project Professional and many others which are in line with the growth of my career. The total cost of this course is INR 50,000.

As per current industry demand and competition, most of the construction companies are entering in turn-key contracts which involves execution of many activities. In order to prepare and check the schedule which includes huge amount activities in MS Excel is not practical and make this task next to impossible. To cope up with the company need, I see no other alternatives than learning this course. However, I need financial help as this course is quite expensive.

I hope you will disburse the loan amount to me and I will repay this amount in monthly installment over the period of 2 years.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours faithfully,
Rakesh Soni

Votes
Average: 8.7 (2 votes)

Comments

Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, look, so, well

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 5.05154639175 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 32.9175257732 94% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 26.3917525773 148% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 3.85567010309 285% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1321.0 937.175257732 141% => OK
No of words: 264.0 206.0 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00378787879 4.54256449028 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 3.78020617076 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89026569535 2.54303337028 114% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 127.690721649 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.617424242424 0.622605031667 99% => OK
syllable_count: 396.9 290.88556701 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.1183258183 44.8134815571 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.3571428571 76.5299724578 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8571428571 16.8248392259 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.64285714286 4.34317383033 38% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 2.54639175258 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0781668830245 0.216113520407 36% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0270699910192 0.0766984524023 35% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0336716178062 0.0603063233224 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.033478865897 0.12726935374 26% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0417961868297 0.0580467560999 72% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 8.37731958763 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 70.7449484536 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 7.45979381443 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 8.71597938144 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.96 7.59969072165 118% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 41.2886597938 179% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 8.62886597938 156% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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