Writing task 1 You are writing your first letter to a pen pal Describe your previous studies and work experience your current activities hobbies and interests Tell your pen pal that you will be visiting him her You should write at least 150 words You shou

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Writing task 1

You are writing your first letter to a pen pal. Describe your previous studies and work experience, your current activities, hobbies and interests.

Tell your pen pal that you will be visiting him/her.
• You should write at least 150 words.
• You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

Hi Gaurav

My name is Niharika and I hope this letter finds you in health and harmony . As we are new pen pals, I hope you would also be looking a meaningful friendship here, as I am quite excited about this.

First of all, I would like to share that I have done my Masters in Computer Applications from Panjab University. Most of my schooling and higher education was done in Chandigarh, as being native of here.
As I am a Software Engineer, I am very fond of programming, however, as being an extrovert and outgoing person, I am passionate about lot of other activities as well. Meeting new people, travelling, trekking, photography are few of my hobbies, along with these my love for food is eternal. Besides trying new cuisines, I have a sweet tooth for variety of baked products.
In addition to these hobbies, I appreciate good music and watching movies, particularly thriller,action,mystery.

Despite of the fact that we have started this bond by means of letters, I would really love to meet you in person. Due to some official work,I will be travelling to your city next month, therefore I hope, we can have an opportunity to meet and have a face to face conversation over a cup of coffee. I will be eagerly waiting for your revert on this.

Yours Faithfully
Niharika

Votes
Average: 8.7 (1 vote)
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IELTS Writing Task I - IELTS General Training

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 75, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...s letter finds you in health and harmony . As we are new pen pals, I hope you wou...
^^
Line 3, column 91, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ou in health and harmony . As we are new pen pals, I hope you would also be looki...
^^
Line 5, column 56, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... would like to share that I have done my Masters in Computer Applications from Pa...
^^
Line 5, column 206, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...in Chandigarh, as being native of here. As I am a Software Engineer, I am very f...
^^^
Line 6, column 78, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y fond of programming, however, as being an extrovert and outgoing person, I am ...
^^
Line 6, column 96, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ing, however, as being an extrovert and outgoing person, I am passionate about l...
^^
Line 7, column 97, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , action
...d watching movies, particularly thriller,action,mystery. Despite of the fact that we...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 141, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , I
...you in person. Due to some official work,I will be travelling to your city next mo...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, however, look, really, so, therefore, well, in addition, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.48453608247 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 32.9175257732 109% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 26.3917525773 114% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1069.0 937.175257732 114% => OK
No of words: 226.0 206.0 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73008849558 4.54256449028 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.87727950738 3.78020617076 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03454209554 2.54303337028 119% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 127.690721649 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.62389380531 0.622605031667 100% => OK
syllable_count: 341.1 290.88556701 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.13402061856 131% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 1.83505154639 272% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 1.44329896907 277% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.9907397199 44.8134815571 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.0833333333 76.5299724578 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8333333333 16.8248392259 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.58333333333 4.34317383033 175% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 2.54639175258 314% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 7.41237113402 148% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1507709508 0.216113520407 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0600314392686 0.0766984524023 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0560203411213 0.0603063233224 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0647681746882 0.12726935374 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0642334736816 0.0580467560999 111% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 8.37731958763 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 70.7449484536 87% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 7.45979381443 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 8.71597938144 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 7.59969072165 111% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 41.2886597938 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 87.0786516854 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.75 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.