You are enrolled at a sports club a month ago but now you cant continue your course Write a letter to your sports club director In your letter 1 Mention your interest in course 2 Explain the issue due to which u r unable to complete 3 Ask for a refund

Essay topics:

You are enrolled at a sports club a month ago but now you cant continue your course.
Write a letter to your sports club director. In your letter,
1.Mention your interest in course
2.Explain the issue due to which u r unable to complete
3. Ask for a refund

Dear Sir or Madam,

Writing this letter to inform you that, I had joined Major Dyan Chand sports club 7 month ago. As I am working in multi nation company and my organization enforcing me to relocate from Delhi to Mumbai. Therefore, i can not continue my Hockey training.

I am very enthusiastic and determined hockey player. As a result, My team coach & all hockey association designated me a Captain of hockey team. In my leadership we won multiple tournament and Hockey management nominated my name for Indian Hockey Team. Nevertheless I can not continue my hockey training consequently i need to shifted from Delhi to Mumbai.

In addition to this, As i am planning to move and withdrwling my name from sports club. In addition to this, i am humbly requesting to you to refund the security deposit and fee amount which i submitted during the admission. If require you may deduct some nominal non-refundable amount. Despite, i need to add on security amount as well as fee amount in my relocation expenditure list.

Awaiting a positive response.

Your faithfully,
Kuldip

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 85, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'month' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'months'.
Suggestion: months
...d joined Major Dyan Chand sports club 7 month ago. As I am working in multi nation co...
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Line 3, column 214, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...locate from Delhi to Mumbai. Therefore, i can not continue my Hockey training. ...
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Line 5, column 254, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Nevertheless,
...minated my name for Indian Hockey Team. Nevertheless I can not continue my hockey training c...
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Line 5, column 318, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ontinue my hockey training consequently i need to shifted from Delhi to Mumbai. ...
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Line 7, column 25, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...i to Mumbai. In addition to this, As i am planning to move and withdrwling my ...
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Line 7, column 110, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
... from sports club. In addition to this, i am humbly requesting to you to refund ...
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Line 7, column 139, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...n to this, i am humbly requesting to you to refund the security deposit and fee a...
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Line 7, column 193, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...e security deposit and fee amount which i submitted during the admission. If requ...
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Line 7, column 227, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...which i submitted during the admission. If require you may deduct some nominal no...
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Line 7, column 245, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...during the admission. If require you may deduct some nominal non-refundable amoun...
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Line 7, column 299, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...nominal non-refundable amount. Despite, i need to add on security amount as well ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, if, may, nevertheless, so, therefore, thus, well, in addition, as a result, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 0.0 7.48453608247 0% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 32.9175257732 88% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 26.3917525773 76% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.85567010309 182% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 907.0 937.175257732 97% => OK
No of words: 182.0 206.0 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98351648352 4.54256449028 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.67297393991 3.78020617076 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97813706321 2.54303337028 117% => OK
Unique words: 113.0 127.690721649 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.620879120879 0.622605031667 100% => OK
syllable_count: 284.4 290.88556701 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.83505154639 218% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 16.3608247423 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.6784305809 44.8134815571 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 69.7692307692 76.5299724578 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.0 16.8248392259 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.69230769231 4.34317383033 177% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 2.54639175258 432% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.94845360825 152% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140964409884 0.216113520407 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0539029811097 0.0766984524023 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0693012694046 0.0603063233224 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0668812264203 0.12726935374 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0639436813199 0.0580467560999 110% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 8.37731958763 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 70.7449484536 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 7.45979381443 118% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.01 8.71597938144 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.19 7.59969072165 121% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 41.2886597938 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 8.62886597938 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 8.54432989691 89% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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