You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help.Write a letter to your friend. In your letter,•give details of your study plans•explain w

Essay topics:

You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help.

Write a letter to your friend. In your letter,

• give details of your study plans

• explain why you want to get a part-time job

• suggest how your friend could help you find a job

Dear Sara,

I hope this letter finds you best. As you are entirely aware of my plan to study abroad, my invitation have accepted and I am going to come to you less than 3 weeks. I really miss you and I'm thrilled to meet you again.

Let me explain you in details. I am accepted to continue my master degree in Computer science. So I will spend two-year programs for completing my tuition which is probably costs 20000 $. beside that, I heard the food stuffs are expensive in your city and while I was calculating the amount of money, I was considering to search for a part-time job to be able to afford my costs.

Furthermore, as the currency prices is fluctuating here , I am worried and if I find a job I will be more convenience with the short migration matters. if you mind please send me some sample of resume in my field. your assistance in this case is gratefully appreciated.

with love,

Chi

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 189, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
...ess than 3 weeks. I really miss you and Im thrilled to meet you again. Let me...
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Line 5, column 220, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... you and Im thrilled to meet you again. Let me explain you in details. I am acce...
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Line 7, column 180, Rule ID: CURRENCY[2]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$20000'.
Suggestion: $20000
...ting my tuition which is probably costs 20000 $. beside that, I heard the food stuffs a...
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Line 7, column 189, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Beside
...uition which is probably costs 20000 $. beside that, I heard the food stuffs are expen...
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Line 9, column 56, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... the currency prices is fluctuating here , I am worried and if I find a job I will...
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Line 9, column 153, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...ience with the short migration matters. if you mind please send me some sample of ...
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Line 9, column 153, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “if” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ience with the short migration matters. if you mind please send me some sample of ...
^^
Line 9, column 215, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Your
...d me some sample of resume in my field. your assistance in this case is gratefully a...
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Line 15, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: With
...case is gratefully appreciated. with love, Chi
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, really, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.48453608247 120% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 32.9175257732 94% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 26.3917525773 76% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 750.0 937.175257732 80% => OK
No of words: 167.0 206.0 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.49101796407 4.54256449028 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.59483629437 3.78020617076 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6370225955 2.54303337028 104% => OK
Unique words: 111.0 127.690721649 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.664670658683 0.622605031667 107% => OK
syllable_count: 230.4 290.88556701 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.8301421604 44.8134815571 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 68.1818181818 76.5299724578 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.1818181818 16.8248392259 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.09090909091 4.34317383033 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 2.54639175258 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.289589272192 0.216113520407 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0998735965342 0.0766984524023 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0730899593828 0.0603063233224 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188801290045 0.12726935374 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.073581277469 0.0580467560999 127% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.3 8.37731958763 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 70.7449484536 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 7.45979381443 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.17 8.71597938144 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 7.59969072165 100% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 41.2886597938 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 8.62886597938 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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