You eat at your college cafeteria at lunch time every day However you think it needs some improvements Write a letter to the college magazine In your letter explain what you like about the cafeteria say what is wrong with it suggest how it could be improv

Essay topics:

You eat at your college cafeteria at lunch time every day.. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college magazine. In your letter:
explain what you like about the cafeteria
say what is wrong with it
suggest how it could be improved
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Duddle,
I am writing to draw your attention to the cafeteria service at college that needs some improvements.
I have been eating food from cafeteria since one year.I have found its food quality is not lower than a three star restaurant and prices were cheaper as compared to other colleges.

Although, they have maintained food quality, but recently the owner of cafeteria has revised the prices. An abrupt change in the price list is un-affordable for students. they have doubled the prices of those food items that have been sold out quickly.

secondly, they have reduced their sitting area and replaced it with dish-washing space. students usually have to wait for half an hour to find out some place to sit and have some food. Visitors usually struggle to get out of sitting area. due to over crowded cafeteria at lunch time, students have to buy food stuff from hawkers outside. I have noticed absentees in my class are increasing due to stomach pain and eating unhygienic food from outside.

As a solution, I would recommend you to take a notice on revised prices and making it affordable for students. secondly, it would be appreciated if you could broaden the space in cafeteria so that students do not have to wait for longer time in queue.

I am looking forward hearing from you.

Yours faithfully,

Votes
Average: 9.1 (2 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, second, secondly, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 32.9175257732 73% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 26.3917525773 125% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1111.0 937.175257732 119% => OK
No of words: 226.0 206.0 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91592920354 4.54256449028 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.87727950738 3.78020617076 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54796957488 2.54303337028 100% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 127.690721649 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.610619469027 0.622605031667 98% => OK
syllable_count: 342.0 290.88556701 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.0262668858 44.8134815571 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.4615384615 76.5299724578 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3846153846 16.8248392259 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.69230769231 4.34317383033 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 2.54639175258 275% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.94845360825 177% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161148986244 0.216113520407 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0654322382096 0.0766984524023 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0674145475734 0.0603063233224 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104629587778 0.12726935374 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0843096959519 0.0580467560999 145% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 8.37731958763 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 70.7449484536 89% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 7.45979381443 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.96 8.71597938144 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 7.59969072165 104% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 41.2886597938 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 81.4606741573 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.25 Out of 9
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