You have 20 minutes to write a response to the prompt below. Once you have written your response, you can read the sample letter below to compare.Question PromptYou are due to start an English language course next week but you will not be able to because

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You have 20 minutes to write a response to the prompt below. Once you have written your response, you can read the sample letter below to compare.

Question Prompt

You are due to start an English language course next week but you will not be able to because you have some problems.

Write a letter to the manager of the language school, Sally Flannigan. In your letter:

explain your situation
describe your problems
tell him/her when you think you can start.
Write at least 150 words.

You should spend no more than 20 minutes on this task.

Dear Ms. Flannigan,

I am writing to let you know that I am unable to attend the English language course that starts next week. I know that I submitted my acceptance letter last month; however, due to some issues that have arisen, I need to retract my acceptance.

My situation has recently changed, and therefore, I am unable to make the commitment of attending class five nights a week. I have recently taken up a waitressing job and most of my shifts are in the evenings. I thought of rescheduling my classes to the later one that starts at 7pm instead of 5pm. However, the main problem is transport. There are no trains available from my workplace to the English language centre and so I have no way of getting there after my shift.

Due to these circumstances, I have to postpone my course until early next year. I would really appreciate it if you could defer my enrollment to the January intake.

I thank you for your understanding.

Yours sincerely,
Valeria Gomez

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 451, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: thereafter
... centre and so I have no way of getting there after my shift. Due to these circumstances...
^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, really, so, therefore, you know

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.48453608247 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 32.9175257732 100% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 26.3917525773 80% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 820.0 937.175257732 87% => OK
No of words: 173.0 206.0 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73988439306 4.54256449028 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.62669911048 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80571389705 2.54303337028 110% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 127.690721649 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.618497109827 0.622605031667 99% => OK
syllable_count: 250.2 290.88556701 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.6710424334 44.8134815571 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.5454545455 76.5299724578 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7272727273 16.8248392259 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 4.34317383033 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213233040159 0.216113520407 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0814497941549 0.0766984524023 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0689003409708 0.0603063233224 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15843893379 0.12726935374 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.058565273333 0.0580467560999 101% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 8.37731958763 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 70.7449484536 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 7.45979381443 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 8.71597938144 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 7.59969072165 100% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 41.2886597938 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 8.62886597938 104% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.