You have a Facebook friend living in another country and s/he is curious to learn about a major news item in your country.Write a letter to your Facebook friend. In your letter•describe a news story in your country•explain why people are interested in

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You have a Facebook friend living in another country and s/he is curious to learn about a major news item in your country.

Write a letter to your Facebook friend. In your letter

• describe a news story in your country

• explain why people are interested in it

• say how the story personally relates to you

Dear Shima

I hope you and your family are well. I am very glad that you are interested in my country's news. Let me know to inform you about a great and amazing sport's event that happens in Iran. This event is a popular derby between two oldest and biggest football teams; Persepolis and Esteghlal.

Indeed, a vast majority of people in Iran are fan of these two teams, therefore, the match among them is very sensitive and challenging. If you search the net, you will find more information about the importance of this competition and most of the time is broadcast from international programs and is covered by global media.

In fact, I would like to tell you about my favorite team "Persepolis" that I really admire it and I am a fanatic fan of this team and, in turn I always follow my team's competitions. Persepolis in biggest football team in Asia and its fans are very loyal and cultured.

Considering the fact that is match is held on Feb 23, I invite you come in here till we can participate in this event. I promise you that it will a memorable happen in your life.

I am appreciate you from hearing about our biggest sport's event.

Yours sincerely

Mans

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 150, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...to inform you about a great and amazing sports event that happens in Iran. This event ...
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Line 7, column 204, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'in the biggest'.
Suggestion: in the biggest
...ollow my teams competitions. Persepolis in biggest football team in Asia and its fans are ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 6, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'appreciated'.
Suggestion: appreciated
...a memorable happen in your life. I am appreciate you from hearing about our biggest spor...
^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, really, therefore, well, in fact

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.48453608247 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 5.05154639175 218% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 32.9175257732 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 26.3917525773 114% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 979.0 937.175257732 104% => OK
No of words: 212.0 206.0 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6179245283 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.81578560438 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81421198044 2.54303337028 111% => OK
Unique words: 125.0 127.690721649 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.589622641509 0.622605031667 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 308.7 290.88556701 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.0497442588 44.8134815571 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.5833333333 76.5299724578 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6666666667 16.8248392259 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 4.34317383033 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 7.41237113402 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153909632413 0.216113520407 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0735002595079 0.0766984524023 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0687852699818 0.0603063233224 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.077181353189 0.12726935374 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0512206228427 0.0580467560999 88% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 8.37731958763 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 70.7449484536 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 7.45979381443 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.22 8.71597938144 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.31 7.59969072165 96% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 41.2886597938 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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