You have just returned from holiday and were not satisfied with your trip. Write to the travel agency. In your letter Say where / when you went on holiday Explain why you are not satisfied with your holiday Tell them what you would like them to do

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You have just returned from holiday and were not satisfied with your trip. Write to the travel agency. In your letter

Say where / when you went on holiday

Explain why you are not satisfied with your holiday

Tell them what you would like them to do

Dear Sir or Madam,

I hope this letter finds you well. As I had spent a week in Thailand and I had booked my tour with your travel agency. I just want to inform you about lack of satisfaction which I have during my trip. However, Thailand is a marvelous country; unfortunately, I have experienced very bad moments there.

Let me explain you in details. I went to Phuket, which is one the picturesque city of Thailand. I arrived there in 24th of July and I have spent a week at Lili hotel, which was located on 1st avenue, Downtown.

As you are entirely aware, the lili hotel is a five-star hotel. despite of its starts, I wish to indicate that it has a lot of backwards which really had bothered me.

While we arrived there the servants were confused and they didn’t pick up our suitcases. After about 1 hours when we called the assistance, she told us our suitcases transferred to a wrong room. Beside this, despite of the stories your travel agents revealed us, all the facilities were not free. Furthermore, one the important facilities that make me to choose this hotel was its triple restaurants. Unreasonably, two of them were closed for anonymous reasons.

Furtheremore, regard to the staggering price of Lili hotel . it was really awful and it even didn’t prepared the options that your agent demonstrated me on its brochure. Since your rules emphasized how customers satisfaction are eminent it will be your respect to send me 10% of all the tour price. I am contacted as the address below. Your assistance in this matter is really appreciated.

Your faithfully,

Chi Chung

Votes
Average: 8.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 13, column 65, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Despite
...e, the lili hotel is a five-star hotel. despite of its starts, I wish to indicate that ...
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Line 21, column 59, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...rd to the staggering price of Lili hotel . it was really awful and it even didn&ap...
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Line 21, column 62, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...to the staggering price of Lili hotel . it was really awful and it even didn'...
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Line 21, column 176, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... agent demonstrated me on its brochure. Since your rules emphasized how customers sat...
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Line 21, column 357, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ed as the address below. Your assistance in this matter is really appreciated. ...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, really, so, well, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 7.48453608247 174% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 4.92783505155 20% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.03092783505 264% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 52.0 32.9175257732 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 26.3917525773 129% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1346.0 937.175257732 144% => OK
No of words: 278.0 206.0 135% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84172661871 4.54256449028 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 3.78020617076 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83111470859 2.54303337028 111% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 127.690721649 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.618705035971 0.622605031667 99% => OK
syllable_count: 414.9 290.88556701 143% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 1.83505154639 272% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 1.44329896907 346% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 12.6804123711 158% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 16.3608247423 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.9069195868 44.8134815571 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 67.3 76.5299724578 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.9 16.8248392259 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.25 4.34317383033 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 1.49484536082 334% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.94845360825 177% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220369117 0.216113520407 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0617147430956 0.0766984524023 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0525992487008 0.0603063233224 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108536695448 0.12726935374 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0563902998238 0.0580467560999 97% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 8.37731958763 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 70.7449484536 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 7.45979381443 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.2 8.71597938144 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 7.59969072165 108% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 41.2886597938 167% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 8.62886597938 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 8.54432989691 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 81.4606741573 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.25 Out of 9
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