you have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone t live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.
Dear Sir or Madam,
My name is Cynthia. I read your advertisement in an Australian magazine and I am writing to apply for this job because I think I am a perfect fit for it.
I have never been to Australia before and this job gives me a chance to live with a local family so that I can encounter the cultures more. meanwhile, I have plenty of experience of taking care of kids. I work as baby sitter during weekends and holidays in my home country and took care of children range from 3 to 8 years old. I am a patient, reliable person.
during my spare time, I will taste different restaurants for local foods and meet new friends.
Thank you for reading this letter and if you need more information, such as recommendation from my previous employers, please feel free to contact me at xxxx@gmail.com.
Best regards,
Cynthia
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 141, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Meanwhile
...that I can encounter the cultures more. meanwhile, I have plenty of experience of taking ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: During
...d. I am a patient, reliable person. during my spare time, I will taste different r...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, while, i think, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.48453608247 27% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 32.9175257732 73% => OK
Preposition: 18.0 26.3917525773 68% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 691.0 937.175257732 74% => OK
No of words: 151.0 206.0 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.5761589404 4.54256449028 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.50545371207 3.78020617076 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80611898511 2.54303337028 110% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 127.690721649 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.708609271523 0.622605031667 114% => OK
syllable_count: 209.7 290.88556701 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.1954205771 44.8134815571 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.7777777778 76.5299724578 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7777777778 16.8248392259 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.44444444444 4.34317383033 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199662744807 0.216113520407 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0587049954214 0.0766984524023 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0641695857802 0.0603063233224 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108781325464 0.12726935374 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.055468954527 0.0580467560999 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.5 8.37731958763 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 70.7449484536 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 7.45979381443 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.99 8.71597938144 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 7.59969072165 98% => OK
difficult_words: 29.0 41.2886597938 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 8.62886597938 104% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 141, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Meanwhile
...that I can encounter the cultures more. meanwhile, I have plenty of experience of taking ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: During
...d. I am a patient, reliable person. during my spare time, I will taste different r...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, while, i think, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.48453608247 27% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 32.9175257732 73% => OK
Preposition: 18.0 26.3917525773 68% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 691.0 937.175257732 74% => OK
No of words: 151.0 206.0 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.5761589404 4.54256449028 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.50545371207 3.78020617076 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80611898511 2.54303337028 110% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 127.690721649 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.708609271523 0.622605031667 114% => OK
syllable_count: 209.7 290.88556701 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.1954205771 44.8134815571 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.7777777778 76.5299724578 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7777777778 16.8248392259 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.44444444444 4.34317383033 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199662744807 0.216113520407 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0587049954214 0.0766984524023 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0641695857802 0.0603063233224 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108781325464 0.12726935374 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.055468954527 0.0580467560999 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.5 8.37731958763 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 70.7449484536 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 7.45979381443 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.99 8.71597938144 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 7.59969072165 98% => OK
difficult_words: 29.0 41.2886597938 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 8.62886597938 104% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.