You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a familyfor six months and look after their six- year-old child.Write a letter to the parents. In your letter- Explain why you would like the job- give details of why you wo

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You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family
for six months and look after their six- year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter
- Explain why you would like the job
- give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
- say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

Dear sir and Madam, 
 
I am writing this letter to the response of advert you have given in an Oppo Magazine for the need of a guardian to your toddler son. Moreover, I will get a chance to have an experience of living with an Australian Family.  
 
I am here in Australia for the internship in Prime Technical Solution for eight months. Back in India, I live in joined Punjabi family with three children of my brother. They are also of the same age, and they love my company because of my friendly nature. So, I would like to have the same surrounding here in the working country. 
 
My job in Australia going to be telecommuting, which means my most of time going to be in front of a computer working from home, there would be an only two visits to the office in a week. My work profile made me an ideal candidate for the job, as I can keep a good eye on your kid. 
 
Lastly, I would like to visit the best malls in Sydney and photograph the daily chaos of the street of the city. I have a great interest in photography and would like to pursue it as a profession soon. 
 
I hope the request mentioned above worth considering. 
 
Yours faithfully 
John Wick 

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 19, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, lastly, moreover, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 32.9175257732 73% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 26.3917525773 144% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1038.0 937.175257732 111% => OK
No of words: 224.0 206.0 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.63392857143 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.86867284054 3.78020617076 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02218624408 2.54303337028 119% => OK
Unique words: 131.0 127.690721649 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.584821428571 0.622605031667 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 301.5 290.88556701 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.13402061856 131% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 12.6804123711 55% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 16.3608247423 196% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.6951639773 44.8134815571 149% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.285714286 76.5299724578 194% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.0 16.8248392259 190% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.71428571429 4.34317383033 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.29896907216 163% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.157143120418 0.216113520407 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0817542861929 0.0766984524023 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0581658208691 0.0603063233224 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.078135222966 0.12726935374 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0847425173992 0.0580467560999 146% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 8.37731958763 196% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.38 70.7449484536 91% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.2 7.45979381443 164% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.17 8.71597938144 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 7.59969072165 105% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 41.2886597938 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 8.62886597938 104% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 8.54432989691 173% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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