You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a familyfor six months and look after their six- year-old child.Write a letter to the parents. In your letter- Explain why you would like the job- give details of why you wo

Essay topics:

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family

for six months and look after their six- year-old child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your letter

- Explain why you would like the job

- give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ

- say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

Dear Mr and Mrs Collins.

My name is Carola. I have seen your advertisements in a magazine and I am writing to you because I would like to be considered for the position you are offering. I really would like to work for you because i think it will be a good experience for you and me. I like to travel, know about different cultures and meet new people. I have never been to Australia but i am pretty sure there are a lot of things to see and try.I have previous experience looking after children. Currently I am working for an Irish family and I take care of for children whose ages vary from three to eight. I have to say that I have never thought that looking after children would be that rewarding. I enjoy spending time with them and I have learnt a lot. I am really patient, tidy, reliable and hardworking.

In addition, I have just completed an first aids course.

If I had a chance to live with you would be grate.I would spend my free time learning English, visiting tourist attractions, trying local food and making new friends.

Thank you for taking the time to read my letter. Please feel free to contact me if you need further details and recommendations.

kind regards

Carola

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 207, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ally would like to work for you because i think it will be a good experience for ...
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Line 3, column 260, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ll be a good experience for you and me. I like to travel, know about different cu...
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Line 3, column 329, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...different cultures and meet new people. I have never been to Australia but i am p...
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Line 3, column 364, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ple. I have never been to Australia but i am pretty sure there are a lot of thing...
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Line 3, column 422, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: I
...here are a lot of things to see and try.I have previous experience looking after ...
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Line 3, column 422, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...here are a lot of things to see and try.I have previous experience looking after ...
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Line 3, column 735, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...time with them and I have learnt a lot. I am really patient, tidy, reliable and h...
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Line 5, column 36, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...g. In addition, I have just completed an first aids course. If I had a chance...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...just completed an first aids course. If I had a chance to live with you would b...
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Line 7, column 51, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: I
... chance to live with you would be grate.I would spend my free time learning Engli...
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Line 13, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Kind
...rther details and recommendations. kind regards Carola
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, really, i think, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 5.05154639175 218% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 32.9175257732 112% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 26.3917525773 91% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 986.0 937.175257732 105% => OK
No of words: 220.0 206.0 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.48181818182 4.54256449028 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.85128510684 3.78020617076 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60083823106 2.54303337028 102% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 127.690721649 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.590909090909 0.622605031667 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 303.3 290.88556701 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 12.6804123711 118% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 16.3608247423 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.7837272033 44.8134815571 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 65.7333333333 76.5299724578 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.6666666667 16.8248392259 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.33333333333 4.34317383033 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 2.54639175258 432% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 7.41237113402 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297833257641 0.216113520407 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0865412660499 0.0766984524023 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0824803549625 0.0603063233224 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12560055605 0.12726935374 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0862314392527 0.0580467560999 149% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.0 8.37731958763 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 70.7449484536 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 7.45979381443 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.11 8.71597938144 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.2 7.59969072165 95% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 41.2886597938 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 8.62886597938 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 8.54432989691 89% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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