you live in an English speaking country and you want to do some voluntary unpaid work in a developing country Write a letter to a company called Cultural Expeditions which organizes such trips In your letter 1 Indicate where you would like to volunteer an

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you live in an English-speaking country and you want to do some voluntary, unpaid work in a developing country. Write a letter to a company called Cultural Expeditions, which organizes such trips. In your letter:
1. Indicate where you would like to volunteer and for how long.
2.Explain why you want to do the voluntary work.
3.State what your skills and experience are.

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to express my interest in volunteering for health-care related activities which your company, Cultural Expeditions, is carrying out in developing countries around the world.

I request you to consider me as one of the volunteer for the upcoming vaccination campaign in India, regarding which you had given an advert in the BBC news channel. Since I am waiting for final results of Nursing masters degree, I have ample amount of time to spend with your team in India. Hence, I will stay in India until the campaigning task is accomplished.

I decided to take part in such unpaid activities after I watched the recent documentary on your company website regarding the poor health condition of children in developing countries. I felt broken seeing that, and immediately took the decision to contribute as much as I can to help these children.

I feel I can contribute a lot during this trip to India because, although I am waiting for my masters degree results, I am a registered nurse, and my experience as pediatric nurse will come handy while on field. Apart from that, I can manage any kind of medical emergency.

Kindly consider me as volunteer for this trip and I am looking forward to hearing from you.

Yours faithfully,
Ms Sruthy Varghese

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...uch as I can to help these children. I feel I can contribute a lot during this...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, look, regarding, while, apart from, i feel, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.48453608247 27% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 32.9175257732 100% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 26.3917525773 129% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1090.0 937.175257732 116% => OK
No of words: 221.0 206.0 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93212669683 4.54256449028 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.85565412703 3.78020617076 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84071374719 2.54303337028 112% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 127.690721649 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.638009049774 0.622605031667 102% => OK
syllable_count: 333.9 290.88556701 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 16.3608247423 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.285316349 44.8134815571 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.0 76.5299724578 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1 16.8248392259 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.3 4.34317383033 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184771190042 0.216113520407 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0628159996761 0.0766984524023 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0684221849528 0.0603063233224 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0996328500415 0.12726935374 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0569523923916 0.0580467560999 98% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 8.37731958763 153% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 70.7449484536 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 7.45979381443 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 8.71597938144 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.09 7.59969072165 120% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 41.2886597938 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 8.62886597938 162% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 8.54432989691 126% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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