You live in a room in a college where you share it with another student You find it very difficult to study and work there because your roommate always has friends visiting He she has parties in the room and sometimes borrows your things without asking yo

Essay topics:

You live in a room in a college where you share it with another student. You find it very difficult to study and work there because your roommate always has friends visiting. He/she has parties in the room and sometimes borrows your things without asking you.

Dear Sir,

I am writing to show my discontentment regarding the room which I am currently sharing with another person, and wish to move into a new accommodation next term, preferably in a single place, as my current sharing arrangements are quite inconvenient.

Due to my roommate's inconsiderate behavior, I find it troublesome to live in my place. He has friends visiting him every single day. Apart from this, he regularly holds parties and constantly plays loud music. In addition, he often borrows my belongings without my permission. A few days ago, she took a book from my desk and lost it, which a borrowed from the library.

You could imagine how is it difficult to survive and focus in such an environment, as I find it challenging to concentrate on my studies and live peacefully, owing to his irrational behavior. Therefore, I am expecting help from you to shift me into a
single room, so that I can pay full attention to my work. I request you to find a single room in the vicinity of the college from the beginning of the next semester.

Thanking you.

Yours faithfully,
Richard Roy

Votes
Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 109, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'concentrating'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'challenge' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: concentrating
...n environment, as I find it challenging to concentrate on my studies and live peacefully, owin...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, regarding, so, therefore, apart from, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.48453608247 27% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 32.9175257732 103% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 26.3917525773 106% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 923.0 937.175257732 98% => OK
No of words: 192.0 206.0 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80729166667 4.54256449028 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.72241943641 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01525616628 2.54303337028 119% => OK
Unique words: 125.0 127.690721649 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.651041666667 0.622605031667 105% => OK
syllable_count: 285.3 290.88556701 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.9720269085 44.8134815571 154% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.3 76.5299724578 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2 16.8248392259 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.3 4.34317383033 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266546425874 0.216113520407 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105422735328 0.0766984524023 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0515349854754 0.0603063233224 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138031271286 0.12726935374 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0406041135931 0.0580467560999 70% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 8.37731958763 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 70.7449484536 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 7.45979381443 127% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 8.71597938144 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 7.59969072165 110% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 41.2886597938 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 8.62886597938 99% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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