You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to study/work.Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter:•describe t

Essay topics:

You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to study/work.

Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter:

• describe the situation

• explain your problems and why it is difficult to study/work

• say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

Dear Sir/ Madam,

I am writing this letter to let you know that I am displeased my accommodation which I am sharing with another student. Although the room is fantastic and have adequate space to study, my classmate is irritating me all the time and make it difficult to concentrate on my work.

Please kindly allow me to elaborate this matter; the room is shared by me and Rahul. I am pursuing in Master in computer application while he is student of arts stream and his main course is relates to dance and music.

As I mentioned that his study is relates to arts and he want to become a professional dancer. Moreover, he does his practice in our room by playing music on very frequency. Therefore, not only it is very difficult situation for me to focus on my work after college but also to take a healthy sleep. Owing to this, my performance is going down day by day.

I hope you look into this matter personally because all my future is depend upon my master degree. If you have another vacant room or the room which is shared my profession student then could you allow me to shift?

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours sincerely,

Aman

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...difficult to concentrate on my work. Please kindly allow me to elaborate this...
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Line 13, column 57, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'wants'.
Suggestion: wants
...hat his study is relates to arts and he want to become a professional dancer. Moreov...
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Line 17, column 70, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'depended'.
Suggestion: depended
...ter personally because all my future is depend upon my master degree. If you have anot...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, moreover, so, then, therefore, while, you know

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.48453608247 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 4.92783505155 20% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 32.9175257732 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 26.3917525773 106% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 978.0 937.175257732 104% => OK
No of words: 211.0 206.0 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.63507109005 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.81127787577 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5656756058 2.54303337028 101% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 127.690721649 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.60663507109 0.622605031667 97% => OK
syllable_count: 303.3 290.88556701 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.19397412 44.8134815571 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.5 76.5299724578 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5833333333 16.8248392259 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.58333333333 4.34317383033 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.275150247417 0.216113520407 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0900279150718 0.0766984524023 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0859619502764 0.0603063233224 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150030195784 0.12726935374 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0727004246681 0.0580467560999 125% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 8.37731958763 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 70.7449484536 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 8.71597938144 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.47 7.59969072165 98% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 41.2886597938 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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