You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work.Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letterdescribe the situat

Essay topics:

You live in a room in college which you share with another student.

However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it

very difficult to work.

Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter

describe the situation

explain your problems and why it is difficult to work

say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to bring to your kind notice that I am facing some issues with my roommate Ela.

Ela is the student of arts background and she is senior to me. She has to work on her assignment till late night and that too in groups. Also she does late night party with her friends.

I am in my first year and have exam on head. I need to work hard for good grades. As Ela work till late night I am not able to get a quality amount of sleep and this disturb my whole day routine. Moreover, I am not able to concentrate in my study due to noise and insufficient sleep.

I would be glad, if you could change my room and allow me to stay with student of first year . Or another accommodation with local family would be highly preferable.

I am looking forward to hear from you.

Yours faithfully,

Hima Kacha

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 138, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...till late night and that too in groups. Also she does late night party with her frie...
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Line 17, column 93, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ow me to stay with student of first year . Or another accommodation with local fam...
^^
Line 21, column 22, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[7]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'to hearing'.
Suggestion: to hearing
...y preferable. I am looking forward to hear from you. Yours faithfully, Hima...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, look, moreover, so, as to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 32.9175257732 85% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 26.3917525773 95% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 696.0 937.175257732 74% => OK
No of words: 161.0 206.0 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.32298136646 4.54256449028 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.56210296601 3.78020617076 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.28859221378 2.54303337028 90% => OK
Unique words: 103.0 127.690721649 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.639751552795 0.622605031667 103% => OK
syllable_count: 204.3 290.88556701 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 16.3608247423 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.9707707104 44.8134815571 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 58.0 76.5299724578 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.4166666667 16.8248392259 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5 4.34317383033 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.94845360825 152% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17826166372 0.216113520407 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0629170547404 0.0766984524023 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0520167502933 0.0603063233224 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102532451176 0.12726935374 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0581301074615 0.0580467560999 100% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 5.6 8.37731958763 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 83.66 70.7449484536 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 4.8 7.45979381443 64% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.18 8.71597938144 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.64 7.59969072165 87% => OK
difficult_words: 24.0 41.2886597938 58% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 8.62886597938 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 8.54432989691 84% => OK
text_standard: 6.0 8.15463917526 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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