You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work.Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter,• describe the si

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You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work.
Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter,
• describe the situation
• explain your problems and why it is difficult to work
• say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to draw you attention towards the problems that I am facing because of my room-mate.
I have been staying in room number 23 with john for last three months and this has been a really tough time for me to focus on work. As you know, john has a very large friend circle and he relishes their company. Everyday he and his companions organize a party in our room, which creates a lot of nuisance.
Often, they consume my items in my absence and make excuses. last week, when I was on a holiday, they damaged my office laptop and I am worried what I will inform to my manager and circumspect how I would continue to provide deliveries to my clients during emergency.
Considering all this, I would be really grateful if my accommodation be changed from twin sharing to an individual area.
Thank you for your attention to this matter and I am looking forward for your support.

Yours sincerely,
Roy

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 213, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[1]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective, and the comma is missing. Did you mean 'every day, he'?
Suggestion: Every day, he
...d circle and he relishes their company. Everyday he and his companions organize a party in ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 288, Rule ID: A_LOT_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun nuisance seems to be countable; consider using: 'a lot of nuisances'.
Suggestion: a lot of nuisances
...nize a party in our room, which creates a lot of nuisance. Often, they consume my items in my ab...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 61, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Last
...y items in my absence and make excuses. last week, when I was on a holiday, they dam...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, really, you know

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 32.9175257732 103% => OK
Preposition: 18.0 26.3917525773 68% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 773.0 937.175257732 82% => OK
No of words: 170.0 206.0 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.54705882353 4.54256449028 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.61087313685 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55451970716 2.54303337028 100% => OK
Unique words: 116.0 127.690721649 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.682352941176 0.622605031667 110% => OK
syllable_count: 235.8 290.88556701 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.9807218313 44.8134815571 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.8888888889 76.5299724578 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8888888889 16.8248392259 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.88888888889 4.34317383033 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1518492318 0.216113520407 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0564626003302 0.0766984524023 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.041001827678 0.0603063233224 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0828337809831 0.12726935374 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0459407484003 0.0580467560999 79% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 8.37731958763 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 70.7449484536 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 7.45979381443 106% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.11 8.71597938144 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 7.59969072165 102% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 41.2886597938 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 8.62886597938 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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