You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job.Write a letter to this friend. In your letter •Say why he/she would not enjoy going to college•Expl

Essay topics:

You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job.

Write a letter to this friend. In your letter

• Say why he/she would not enjoy going to college

• Explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her

• Suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her

Dear Liza,

How are you doing? I received your letter last week and sorry for my late reply as I was busy with some of the urgent office work.Before writing this letter , I have been thinking a lot about the advice that I would give you on your career path and higher studies selection.

I think you should not go to college at this moment and you better start a suitable job in a good company.Since you have completed your secondary education well and you have been engaging in studies for last seventeen years ,you might feel uncomfortable and stress ,if you continue your higher studies in full time.

Obtaining a suitable job is a pretty good idea for you because you would get a chance to interact with different types of people ,you can learn while you are working and also you would get a salary which helps you to feel independently confident enough.

According to my point of view and my personal experiences, some of the suitable career paths for you are Supply chain management, Financial management, Logistics, and Marketing. These job areas always lead to higher career development paths and there are plenty of part time diplomas and degrees in these areas which you can follow while working.

I think I have given my honest opinion to you with my feedback. If you want to discuss further regarding this , let’s meet one day and discuss. I hope my responses would give you some valuable advice to choose your decision wisely.

Best of luck and Cheers!!

Lots of love,

Vajira

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, regarding, second, so, well, while, i think

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 4.92783505155 162% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 5.05154639175 238% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 32.9175257732 134% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 26.3917525773 106% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1253.0 937.175257732 134% => OK
No of words: 262.0 206.0 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78244274809 4.54256449028 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02323427807 3.78020617076 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51763465868 2.54303337028 99% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 127.690721649 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576335877863 0.622605031667 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 386.1 290.88556701 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.83505154639 218% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 16.3608247423 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 94.7124067902 44.8134815571 211% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 125.3 76.5299724578 164% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2 16.8248392259 156% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.3 4.34317383033 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 13.0 2.54639175258 511% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.288841684365 0.216113520407 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103031714227 0.0766984524023 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0789988683447 0.0603063233224 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141376055263 0.12726935374 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0879611486755 0.0580467560999 152% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 8.37731958763 170% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 70.7449484536 76% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 7.45979381443 165% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 8.71597938144 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 7.59969072165 104% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 41.2886597938 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 8.62886597938 209% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 12.4 8.54432989691 145% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 8.15463917526 221% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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