You recently visited a store to repair your computer but they couldn't fix it. Write a letter to the store manager and say,What was the problem with your compute?What happened in the store?What do you want them to do about it?

Essay topics:

You recently visited a store to repair your computer but they couldn't fix it. Write a letter to the store manager and say,
What was the problem with your compute?
What happened in the store?
What do you want them to do about it?

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to complain about ill experience that i have at your store.

To begin with, about one week ago, I purchased computer of brand name Dell from your retail outlet. When I came back home, I turned it on and I found that Bluetooth mouse was not detected. So, I restarted it, but suddenly it showed me a blank screen.

Therefore, I went to back to a store and spoke to sales executive called Kajal. She sent my computer to Dell's service center. After two days, When I came to collect it, defects were not solved. Unfortunately, Kajal informed me I was not entitled to a refund.

I think it is only fair that I get replacement with new one or I be reimbursed for this defective product and I therefore kindly request that you provide a full refund or replacement at your earliest oppotunity.

I would be greatful if you could respond at your earliest convenience.

Yours sincerely,
Kajal Desai

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 14, column 12, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ience. Yours sincerely, Kajal Desai
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, therefore, i think, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.03092783505 198% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 32.9175257732 112% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 26.3917525773 72% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 776.0 937.175257732 83% => OK
No of words: 167.0 206.0 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.64670658683 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.59483629437 3.78020617076 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68700189864 2.54303337028 106% => OK
Unique words: 113.0 127.690721649 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.676646706587 0.622605031667 109% => OK
syllable_count: 243.9 290.88556701 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.232914221 44.8134815571 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 70.5454545455 76.5299724578 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.1818181818 16.8248392259 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.18181818182 4.34317383033 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 7.41237113402 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.94845360825 152% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214156030599 0.216113520407 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0700043150758 0.0766984524023 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0461734735433 0.0603063233224 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112243019341 0.12726935374 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0432575995405 0.0580467560999 75% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.1 8.37731958763 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 70.7449484536 91% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 7.45979381443 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.1 8.71597938144 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 7.59969072165 111% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 41.2886597938 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 8.62886597938 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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