You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. you want to tell him how you feel.Write a letter to the singer .In your letter say how you feel about his performancegive details of your musicAL activities explain how you woul

Essay topics:

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. you want to tell him how you feel.

Write a letter to the singer .In your letter

say how you feel about his performance

give details of your musicAL activities

explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities.

Dear Gurnam,

I am writing to you because I had attended your concert in the civic hotel on 28th august. Since then , your exquisite performance has made me your a huge fan.

Firstly, All of the singers had performed marvelous, but when i had listened to your energetic voice it made me realised how lucky glance over you singing lively facing us.Besides, the singing on high note in each paragraph had made me fell over the moon. Generally, you are a rock star with an electric voice and a stamina to sing for prolong time with such a pleasurable sound simultaneously making others entertaining.

Secondly, I have fondness of playing guitar and have learned to play some of your favorite notes too. Basically, belonging from strong musical background and achieving diploma in music has aspired me a lot to write to you and learn some skills. I have joined your music academy already and trying to sing efficiently and practice the music through your basic lessons provided by the tutor.

Lastly, I would like you to take a keen interest in my letter to aid me in teaching personally for the further knowledge and improvements in the music. I have a strong determination to build up my career so getting some notes and necessary information can help me excel my path.

I shall look forward to your reply soon.

Yours faithfully,

jasmin kaur

Votes
Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...e civic hotel on 28th august. Since then , your exquisite performance has made me ...
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Suggestion: All the
...has made me your a huge fan. Firstly, All of the singers had performed marvelous, but w...
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Line 5, column 53, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... of the singers had performed marvelous, but when i had listened to your energeti...
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Line 5, column 64, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...gers had performed marvelous, but when i had listened to your energetic voice it...
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Line 5, column 144, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t made me realised how lucky glance over you singing lively facing us.Besides, th...
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Line 5, column 175, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Besides
...ance over you singing lively facing us.Besides, the singing on high note in each parag...
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Line 5, column 381, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...olong time with such a pleasurable sound simultaneously making others entertainin...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, firstly, lastly, look, second, secondly, so, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 1.0 7.48453608247 13% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 5.05154639175 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 32.9175257732 100% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 26.3917525773 121% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1125.0 937.175257732 120% => OK
No of words: 233.0 206.0 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82832618026 4.54256449028 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.90696013833 3.78020617076 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70537123711 2.54303337028 106% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 127.690721649 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.643776824034 0.622605031667 103% => OK
syllable_count: 351.9 290.88556701 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 16.3608247423 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.5752042663 44.8134815571 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.272727273 76.5299724578 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1818181818 16.8248392259 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.36363636364 4.34317383033 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 2.54639175258 275% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 7.41237113402 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22511881167 0.216113520407 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0816879425437 0.0766984524023 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0435042034844 0.0603063233224 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112740970693 0.12726935374 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0415659269379 0.0580467560999 72% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 8.37731958763 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 70.7449484536 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 7.45979381443 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 8.71597938144 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 7.59969072165 112% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 41.2886597938 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 8.62886597938 162% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 8.54432989691 122% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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