You went to the local hospital’s Emergency Department with your young child who had severe stomach pains. You had to wait for almost four hours before your daughter was treated by a doctor and, while you were waiting, you were constantly ignored by the other staff.
Write a letter to the Registrar, complaining about the service you received.
Dear Sir,
I am writing this letter to complain about the deficiencies in services at local hospital emergency ward.
On last Friday i.e. 18th April 2018 around noon, my daughter informed to me about the severe stomach ache and immediately I contacted to nearby Sherwood rise medical center. Unfortunately, medical practitioner was on leave and support staff asked me to go to city local hospital for emergency services.
Since pain was getting worst by passing hours so I took my daughter to local hospital with my insurance paper. I contacted to receptionist for getting appointment in emergency ward but I was informed that emergency ward is full of patients and there is not enough staff. Moreover, I was advised to wait for some time until doctor arrives.
I waited patiently for an hour and my daughter was suffering from pain so again I contacted to receptionist. I must bring into your notice that her behavior was inappropriate and she replied very rudely that if I can’t wait then I should visit other hospital. After four hours of waiting, doctor arrived and checked my daughter in emergency ward.
Though my daughter was given right treatment and she is fine now, whole incident was remorseful. Hospital staff must have some sympathy with the patients and attendants. I believe that quality of services can be improved at city hospital so that nobody goes through the ordeal.
I may be contacted at 876543 for more information. I am looking forward to hear from you.
Yours sincerely
Tom
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Sir, I am writing this ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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Dear Sir, I am writing this letter to complain abo...
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Line 4, column 16, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'getting the worst'.
Suggestion: getting the worst
...for emergency services. Since pain was getting worst by passing hours so I took my daughter ...
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Line 7, column 51, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ntacted at 876543 for more information. I am looking forward to hear from you. ...
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Line 7, column 72, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[7]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'to hearing'.
Suggestion: to hearing
... more information. I am looking forward to hear from you. Yours sincerely Tom
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Line 9, column 16, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ard to hear from you. Yours sincerely Tom
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, may, moreover, so, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 7.48453608247 174% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 5.05154639175 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 32.9175257732 106% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 26.3917525773 129% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1265.0 937.175257732 135% => OK
No of words: 253.0 206.0 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0 4.54256449028 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98822939669 3.78020617076 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77083838309 2.54303337028 109% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 127.690721649 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.596837944664 0.622605031667 96% => OK
syllable_count: 391.5 290.88556701 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 12.6804123711 118% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.3823312728 44.8134815571 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.3333333333 76.5299724578 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8666666667 16.8248392259 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.53333333333 4.34317383033 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 2.54639175258 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 7.41237113402 40% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 1.49484536082 602% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230652155234 0.216113520407 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0765873562639 0.0766984524023 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0347234672954 0.0603063233224 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106540868742 0.12726935374 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.039845173206 0.0580467560999 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 8.37731958763 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 70.7449484536 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 7.45979381443 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.42 8.71597938144 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 7.59969072165 101% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 41.2886597938 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 8.62886597938 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 81.4606741573 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.25 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.