You went to the local hospital's emergency department with your young child who had severe stomach pains. You had to wait for almost four hours before your daughter was treated by a doctor and while you were waiting, you were constantly ignored by th

Essay topics:

You went to the local hospital's emergency department with your young child who had severe stomach pains. You had to wait for almost four hours before your daughter was treated by a doctor and while you were waiting, you were constantly ignored by the other staff. Write a letter to the registrar, complaining about the service you received.

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to complain about the local Civil Hospital Toronto's staff because of their negligible behaviour for an emergency case of my daughter.

Last week, my daughter suddenly fell on the floor due to unbearable stomach ache. We all got extremely worried and I took her to the civil hospital's emergency ward to get her treated. I was shocked to hear from the head nurse that they are occupied with other works and therefore cannot admit my daughter at the moment.

I had no other option than to wait. While I was seeking for the helper, I made request to many other staff members but I was totally ignored. I heard the doctor and other faculty members were gossiping inside the ward.

I would request you to take strict action towards this kind of unacceptable treatment. I had to wait for four hours to get my daughter admitted and till that time she suffered a lot. To avoid any mishaps owing to the ignorance of staff, every staff member should follow the rules of emergency department.

Hoping for a prompt and strict action on this.

Yours faithfully,

Patrick Smith.

Votes
Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 88, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ds this kind of unacceptable treatment. I had to wait for four hours to get my da...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, therefore, while, as to, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 32.9175257732 79% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 26.3917525773 95% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 920.0 937.175257732 98% => OK
No of words: 194.0 206.0 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74226804124 4.54256449028 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.73207559907 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43023607936 2.54303337028 96% => OK
Unique words: 129.0 127.690721649 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.664948453608 0.622605031667 107% => OK
syllable_count: 278.1 290.88556701 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.3793202418 44.8134815571 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.6666666667 76.5299724578 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1666666667 16.8248392259 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.08333333333 4.34317383033 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 7.41237113402 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 1.49484536082 669% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22411000461 0.216113520407 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0688042036745 0.0766984524023 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0321456559342 0.0603063233224 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.095353321897 0.12726935374 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0466345873452 0.0580467560999 80% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 8.37731958763 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 70.7449484536 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 7.45979381443 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 8.71597938144 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 7.59969072165 108% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 41.2886597938 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.