You went to a theatre yesterday with a friend. Your friend had an accident and a staff member helped. Write to the manager:• How it happened• How staff member helped• What should be done in the future.

Essay topics:

You went to a theatre yesterday with a friend. Your friend had an accident and a staff member helped. Write to the manager:
• How it happened
• How staff member helped
• What should be done in the future.

Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing to express my dissatisfaction about a horrified event that I encountered at your theatre last weekend. I was with my friend Colin when I slipped and damaged my right knee by hitting on the floor.

This particularly happened because of water which was spilled on the surface. Moreover, the lights were switched off for that particular walking passage. In addition, one of your staff member told me that they do not turn on the lights for an evening show, which was certainly surprising.

However, the incredible help provided by Sarah astonished me; she was a supervisor for that event. She rushed instantly and gave a first aid, which helped to reduce the swelling. Then, she arranged to turn on the lights and to mop the floor.

Firstly, I would recommend you not to switch off the lights, especially at the aisle-walking path. Secondly, the arena should be inspected by a senior staff before opening the gates for public. This would prominently eradicate such incident in future.

Thank you for your consideration.

Kind regards,
Jerry

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 8, column 242, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...uld prominently eradicate such incident in future. Thank you for your consideration. ...
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, well, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.03092783505 264% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 25.0 32.9175257732 76% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 26.3917525773 87% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 908.0 937.175257732 97% => OK
No of words: 181.0 206.0 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01657458564 4.54256449028 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.66791821706 3.78020617076 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7955801105 2.54303337028 110% => OK
Unique words: 121.0 127.690721649 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.668508287293 0.622605031667 107% => OK
syllable_count: 268.2 290.88556701 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 3.0 0.824742268041 364% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 16.3608247423 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.3572879401 44.8134815571 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 69.8461538462 76.5299724578 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.9230769231 16.8248392259 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.46153846154 4.34317383033 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.94845360825 152% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165362962507 0.216113520407 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0470049164845 0.0766984524023 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0416617516331 0.0603063233224 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0821513379562 0.12726935374 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0268974091005 0.0580467560999 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 8.37731958763 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 70.7449484536 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 7.45979381443 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.24 8.71597938144 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 7.59969072165 116% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 41.2886597938 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 8.62886597938 99% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 8.54432989691 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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